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More and more people nowadays choose to live alone. Why is it the case? Is it a positive or negative development for the society?

More and more people nowadays choose to live alone. Why is it the case? Is it a positive or negative development for the society? aVDJV
The number of people determining to live independently out of their family home is remarkably accelerated. There are many underlying reasons behind this trend and this can affect social development. I am in favour of two significant causes explaining this trend. Firstly, people may gain a better sense of freedom when living alone. In other words, they will be autonomous in every aspect of their private lives without the supervision of their parents. For instance, people can put all their attention on their work without being disturbed or engage in a movie all day without the grumbles of family members. In addition, moving out of the family house is an effective way to escape from family conflicts. Due to the generation gap, parents and children rarely share the same way of thinking which could potentially result in fierce quarrels. I still remember I had fought against my father because of the different ideas about which university I should attend. At that time, I wished to grow up faster and start living on my own. Consequently, living independently provides people with more private spaces and helps prevent family members from unworthy conflicts. Personally, I think this trend has both merits and demerits in promoting the advancement of society. On the one hand, the noticeable increasing number of one-person households may reflect a healthy economy. This is because when the economy develops, more job opportunities and extravagant income will be created, giving rise to stable finance for a large number of residents. As a result, the rate of people who can afford a private house will accelerate. On the other hand, living independently may take a toll on psychological health of people. Some people living on their own have to suffer from depression and loneliness because of the lack of human interacts. Some sink into pessimistic feelings due to the inability to afford the cost of living. In conclusion, to gain independence in life and keep harmonious relationships among family members, living alone has become a common trend recently. This trend, as far as I am concerned, will deliver benefits for social advancement.
The number of
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determining to
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out of their
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family
home is
remarkably
accelerated. There are
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underlying reasons behind this
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and this can affect social development.

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of two significant causes explaining this
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Firstly
,
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people
may gain a better sense of freedom when
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living
alone.
In other words
, they will be autonomous in every aspect of their private
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lives
without the supervision of their parents.
For instance
,
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people
can put all their attention on their work without
being disturbed
or engage in a movie all day without the grumbles of
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family
members.
In addition
, moving out of the
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family
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house
is an effective way to escape from
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family
conflicts. Due to the generation gap, parents and children rarely share the same way of thinking which could
potentially
result in fierce quarrels. I
still
remember I had fought against my father
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because
of the
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different
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ideas
about which university I should attend. At that time, I wished to grow up faster and
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start
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living
on my
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Consequently
,
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living
independently
provides
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people
with more private spaces and
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helps
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prevent
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family
members from unworthy conflicts.

Personally
, I
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think
this
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trend
has both merits and demerits in promoting the advancement of society. On the one hand, the noticeable increasing number of one-person households may reflect a healthy economy. This is
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because
when the economy develops, more job opportunities and extravagant income will
be created
, giving rise to stable finance for
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a large number of
residents.
As a result
, the rate of
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people
who can afford a private
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house
will accelerate.
On the other hand
,
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living
independently
may take a toll on psychological health of
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people
.
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Some
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people
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living
on their
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own
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have to
suffer from depression and loneliness
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because
of the lack of human interacts.
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Some
sink into pessimistic feelings due to the inability to afford the cost of living.

In conclusion
, to gain independence in life and
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keep
harmonious relationships among
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family
members,
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living
alone has become a common
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trend
recently. This
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, as far as I
am concerned
, will deliver benefits for social advancement.
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IELTS essay More and more people nowadays choose to live alone. Why is it the case? Is it a positive or negative development for the society?

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