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More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are possible solutions? v.3

More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are possible solutions? v. 3
An increasing number of people in the emerging markets are showing a rising trend of owning their private vehicles, and a primary reason for this is rising income levels in these countries. However, this brings along with it is devastating environmental damages and higher carbon emissions. In my opinion, the Government has a huge role in creating public infrastructure which would encourage people to use more public transportation. The damage caused due to a large number of cars is becoming more and more evident. Are you wondering how? In recent years, studies show that temperatures have increased from an average of 25 degrees to 30 in just two decades, particularly in new markets. Furthermore, natural calamities have increased showing that there clearly exists an imbalance between man and nature. More world nations are heeding to the need of having solutions to these problems. Firstly, it is an appreciable fact that countries have started to recognize this has a problem and have started spending public money to develop infrastructure. For instance, many states in India now have metro's and tramps, which carry an average of 3. 5 million people daily and thereby reducing carbon emissions. Additionally, creating awareness among people and providing them with cheap and subsidized transportation facilities also could solve the problem. Hence, in order to reduce the environmental damage and to preserve nature for our future generations, I personally feel that governmental institutions have a huge role to play and this would provide economic benefits that would last for future generations.
An increasing number of
people
in the emerging markets are showing a rising trend of owning their private vehicles, and a primary reason for this is rising income levels in these countries.
However
, this brings along with it is devastating environmental damages and higher carbon emissions. In my opinion, the
Government
has a huge role in creating public infrastructure which would encourage
people
to
use
more public transportation.

The damage caused due to
a large number of
cars is becoming more and more evident. Are you wondering how? In recent years, studies
show
that temperatures have increased from an average of 25 degrees to 30 in
just
two decades,
particularly
in new markets.
Furthermore
, natural calamities have increased showing that there
clearly
exists an imbalance between
man
and nature.

More world nations are heeding to the need of having solutions to these problems.
Firstly
, it is an appreciable fact that countries have
started
to recognize this has a problem and have
started
spending public money to develop infrastructure.
For instance
,
many
states in India
now
have metro's and tramps, which carry an average of 3. 5 million
people
daily and thereby reducing carbon emissions.
Additionally
, creating awareness among
people
and providing them with
cheap
and subsidized transportation facilities
also
could solve the problem.

Hence
, in order to
reduce
the environmental damage and to preserve nature for our future generations, I
personally
feel that governmental institutions have a huge role to play and this would provide economic benefits that would last for future generations.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are possible solutions? v. 3

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253 words
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