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More and more people are moving from the rural area to big cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in a big city? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

More and more people are moving from the rural area to big cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in a big city? Glrkw
Life’ demand is more and more increase due to the development of the world. Therefore, this leads to the emigration of a great deal of people from rural to city with the hope to find a job help them catch up with this current industrial world. Nevertheless, living in a big city does not just only has benefit. This essay will clarify the advantages and disadvantages of living in a metropolis. First of all, people have more opportunities to seek a job by moving to a city. This not only decrease the unemployment rate but also gain average income per capital of a country. Furthermore, in city, residents can easy find basic infrastructure such as supermarket for food, hospital for health, park for entertainment and so on. In contrast, there are a lot of drawback if a person lives in city. First, with the busy life in this place, people will have more problem about psychology for example stress. Evil rate in city is higher than in rural so that threat to the life of people. In conclusion, living in the city all have both benefit and drawback. From my perspective, I prefer to live in city because the structure as well as life quality can immediately respond for my demand
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demand is more and more increase due to the development of the world.
Therefore
, this leads to the emigration of a great deal of
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people
from rural to city with the hope to find a job
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help
them catch up with this
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current
industrial world.
Nevertheless
, living in a
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big
city does not
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has benefit. This essay will clarify the advantages and disadvantages of living in a metropolis.

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First of all
,
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people
have more opportunities to seek a job by moving to a city. This not
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only
decrease the unemployment rate
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also
gain average income per capital of a country.
Furthermore
, in city, residents can easy find basic infrastructure such as supermarket for food, hospital for health, park for entertainment and
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so
on.

In contrast
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drawback if a person
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lives
in city.
First
, with the busy
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life
in this place,
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people
will have more problem about psychology
for example
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stress
. Evil rate in city is higher than in rural
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so
that threat to the
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life
of
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.

In conclusion
, living in the city all have both benefit and drawback. From my perspective, I prefer to
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live
in city
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the structure
as well
as
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life
quality can immediately respond for my
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demand
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IELTS essay More and more people are moving from the rural area to big cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in a big city?

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