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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? v.19

More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? v. 19
These days, many people around the world are struggling to deal with rising living costs. The following essay will outline some of the effects of this issue, and some possible solutions. Higher living costs are affecting both individuals and society in a number of ways. On an individual level, many people, particularly those living in big cities these days, cannot keep up with the rising costs of living and therefore have to have more than one job in order to make ends meet. As a result, these people barely have any time left for leisure activities and could even be more prone to negative medical conditions like depression or anxiety disorder. On a societal level, rising living costs can cause people with financial problems to turn to crime in order to make more money. For example, in some Asian countries where the monthly salary of a police officer is very low, many of them turn to corruption to make enough money. Although rising living costs pose serious problems in many places, there are a number of solutions that could be implemented to help tackle this issue. Firstly, individuals need to learn how to budget their income more effectively, and be careful not to waste money. By adhering to a strict budget, people will be able to pay their bills and save money to cover other expenses. On the other hand, governments should enact laws to ensure that citizens receive minimum wages that are enough to cover rising living expenses. Lastly, governments can create more jobs, particularly in big cities where living costs are much higher. In conclusion, although many people around the world are finding it difficult to cope with rising living costs, there are a number of solutions that may help to mitigate the problem.
These days,
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rising
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living
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. The following essay will outline
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some of the
effects of this issue, and
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some
possible solutions.

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living
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costs
are affecting both individuals and society in a number of ways. On an individual level,
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people
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living
in
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big
cities these days, cannot
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keep
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costs
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for leisure activities and could even be more prone to
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medical conditions like depression or anxiety disorder. On a societal level,
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rising
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living
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costs
can cause
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people
with financial problems to turn to crime in order to
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make
more money.
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Asian countries where the monthly salary of a police officer is
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very
low,
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of them turn to corruption to
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make
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enough
money.

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pose serious problems in
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places, there are a number of solutions that could
be implemented
to
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tackle this issue.
Firstly
, individuals need to learn how to budget their income more
effectively
, and be careful not to waste money. By adhering to a strict budget,
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people
will be able to pay their bills and save money to cover other expenses.
On the other hand
,
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governments
should enact laws to ensure that citizens receive minimum wages that are
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enough
to cover
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rising
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living
expenses.
Lastly
,
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governments
can create more jobs,
particularly
in
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big
cities where
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living
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costs
are much higher.

In conclusion
, although
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people
around the world are finding it difficult to cope with
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living
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costs
, there are a number of solutions that may
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help
to mitigate the problem.
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IELTS essay More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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