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More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v.11

More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 11
Nowadays, the technology has altered our working style and gave the chance to the employees to do their job duties from home. While some people claim that this has a positive impact for both the companies and the workforce, others argue it has a negative effect on the companies. I agree to some extent with working from home as it has some advantages such as flexibility and disadvantages such as less productivity. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments and provide a conclusion with my opinion. To begin with, there are several advantages linked with working from home. Firstly, working from home reduces the time wasted during the commute. As a result, they will start their work with full power and energy without feel exhausted from the traffic. For example, the workers do not need to awake very early in the morning to go to the office, and they will start working from home with a fresh mind. Secondly, Working from home gives the employee the flexibility to manage their family matters without impacting their performance. By doing this, the workforce will be able to balance between their personal life and professional career. On the other hand, working from home has some negative factors. To commence with, employees will lose their motivation during working from home, and they might not give the work the needed importance. As a result, the production might be reduced and the delivery of the tasks will be delayed. In addition, working from office enhance the workforce collaboration and the social life. Due to this, working from home will increase the tension between the employees and impact the task that requires more collaboration between the team members. For instance, some activities need a face to face meeting for brainstorming and discussion, which require all the team members to be in the office. To sum up, there is no doubt that working from home has advantages such as flexibility, but it is linked with many disadvantages that impact the productivity of the employees. However, I profoundly believe that the advantages of working from home will be an added value to the companies and the employees, if it is regulated by processes and rules to control it.
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working
style and gave the chance to the
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employees
to do their job duties from home. While
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positive
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companies
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companies
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from home as it has
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advantages
such as flexibility and disadvantages such as less productivity. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments and provide a conclusion with my opinion.

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from home.
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reduces
the time wasted during the commute.
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their work with full power and energy without feel exhausted from the traffic.
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early in the morning to go to the office, and they will
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from home with a fresh mind.
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,
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from home gives the
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employee
the flexibility to manage their family matters without impacting their performance. By doing this, the workforce will be able to balance between their personal life and professional career.

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negative
factors. To commence with,
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employees
will lose their motivation during
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working
from home, and they might not give the work the needed importance.
As a result
, the production might be
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reduced
and the delivery of the tasks will
be delayed
.
In addition
,
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from office enhance the workforce collaboration and the social life. Due to this,
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working
from home will increase the tension between the
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employees
and impact the task that requires more collaboration between the team members.
For instance
,
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some
activities need a face to face meeting for brainstorming and discussion, which require all the team members to be in the office.

To sum up, there is no doubt that
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from home has
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advantages
such as flexibility,
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disadvantages that impact the productivity of the
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employees
.
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, I
profoundly
believe that the
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of
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from home will be an
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added
value to the
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companies
and the
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employees
, if it
is regulated
by processes and
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rules
to control it.
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IELTS essay More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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