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More and more children are accessing the Internet unsupervised This can sometimes put them at risk What problems do you think parents face when dealing with their children using the Internet How can this problem be solved v.1

More and more children are accessing the Internet unsupervised This can sometimes put them at risk What problems do you think parents face when dealing with their children using the Internet How can this problem be solved v. 1
It is true that the amount of waste being managed by recycling in many countries is very insignificant. Although introducing laws in order to enforce recycling is a good solution, I believe there are other ways of encouraging people to embrace this form of waste management. One of the ways to increase the rate of recycling is to introduce waste disposal laws. By making offenders who use other non environmentally friendly means to dispose their waste serve some jail term or pay some fine, people may be compelled to recycle their waste. If more and more people recycle wastes like plastics and metals, the environment will be less toxic and governments would save more. For example, in Europe, there are stringent laws against conventional methods of waste disposal. This has made their environment more healthy and contributed more positively towards climate change. However, apart from enforcing waste recycling, there are other ways to encourage this method of refuse management. I believe that educating people on the importance of recycling is very important. If people realise the long term consequence of toxic waste disposal, they would be encouraged to recycle more. Also, some people have some misconceptions about the safety of recycled products. Some feel that recycled goods might be harmful, however, showing them its completely safe would make them embrace the idea of recycling more. Some of the ways in which people could be further enlightened include; placing advertisements on Tvs and radios, and organising community outreaches that address topics of climate change and global warming. In conclusion, while introducing and enforcing environmental laws could be helpful in convincing people to recycle more, I am of the opinion that teaching people the importance of recycling would also help to increase the rates of recycling.
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laws
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recycling
is a
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good
solution, I believe there are other
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ways
of encouraging
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people
to embrace this form of
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waste
management.

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ways
to increase the rate of
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recycling
is to introduce
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waste
disposal
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other non
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their
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. If more and more
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recycle
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wastes
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would save more.
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, in Europe, there are stringent
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laws
against conventional methods of
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waste
disposal. This has made their environment more healthy and contributed more
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, there are other
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ways
to encourage this method of refuse management. I believe that educating
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people
on the importance of
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recycling
is
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more.
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some
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people
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Tvs
and radios, and
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community outreaches that address topics of climate
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change
and global warming.

In conclusion
, while introducing and enforcing environmental
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laws
could be helpful in convincing
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people
to
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recycle
more, I am of the opinion that teaching
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people
the importance of
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would
also
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help
to increase the rates of
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.
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IELTS essay More and more children are accessing the Internet unsupervised This can sometimes put them at risk What problems do you think parents face when dealing with their children using the Internet How can this problem be solved v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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