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more and more are relying on the private car as theri major means of transportation. describe some of the problems overreliance on cars, causes, and suggest at least one possible solution.

more and more are relying on the private car as theri major means of transportation. describe some of the problems overreliance on cars, causes, and suggest at least one possible solution. J1VD
More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems overreliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. In this modern time period, mostly people are preferring to use vehicles and other certain types of transportation. In this case, over or irrelevant use of transportation cause two main problems, the first problem is pollution, and the second cause is unhealthy life. However, the solution of these problems are using of bicycles and walk. if destination is not far enough, people should walk which will help a lot to get rid from pollution and unhealthy lifestyles. I firmly believe that the most effective problem is pollution which can cause global warming, and unhealthy life because of extraordinary dependance on transportation vehicles. Additionally, it can affect our health because polluted environment is not good for our body system, and it can affect biodiversity. For this reason, people lungs can stop function effectively. For instance, a person is using car or motor bike excessively, and making our habitat polluted, then everybody will get health problems. Similarly, heart problem, and high blood pressure. In my point of view, people must walk, and they do not use transportations unnecessarily which can help them to overcome these problems. People must use bicycles which can aid them with health diseases, and it will not influence our environment greater. Namely, people should not depend on cars, and other kind of transportation, if they can sort out those commitments by using bicycles or by walk. On the whole, I suppose people should walk and use bicycles for shorter destinations which can help them to easily deal with, and other health problem which may cause lifetime health defects in thousands of people.
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are relying on the private
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as their major means of
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overreliance
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cars
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cause
, and suggest at least one possible solution.

In this modern time period,
mostly
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people
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are preferring
to
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use
vehicles and other certain types of
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transportation
.
In this case
, over or irrelevant
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use
of
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transportation
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cause
two main
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problems
, the
first
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problem
is pollution, and the second
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cause
is unhealthy life.
However
, the solution of these
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problems
are using of
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bicycles
and
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walk
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if
destination is not far
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enough
,
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people
should
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walk
which will
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help
a lot to
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rid from
pollution and unhealthy lifestyles.

I
firmly
believe that the most effective
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problem
is pollution which can
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cause
global warming, and unhealthy life
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because
of extraordinary
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dependance
on
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transportation
vehicles.
Additionally
, it can affect our
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health
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because
polluted environment is not
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good
for our body system, and it can affect biodiversity.
For this reason
,
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people
lungs can
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stop
function
effectively
.
For instance
, a person is using
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car
or motor bike
excessively
, and making our habitat polluted, then everybody will
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get
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health
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problems
.
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, heart
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problem
, and high blood pressure.

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people
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must
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walk
, and they do not
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use
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transportations
unnecessarily
which can
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them to overcome these
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problems
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People
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must
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use
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bicycles
which can aid them with
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health
diseases, and it will not influence our environment greater.
Namely
,
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people
should not depend on
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cars
, and other kind of
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transportation
, if they can sort out those commitments by using
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bicycles
or by walk.

On the whole
, I suppose
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people
should
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walk
and
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use
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bicycles
for shorter destinations which can
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help
them to
easily
deal with, and other
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health
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problem
which may
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cause
lifetime
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health
defects in thousands of
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people
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IELTS essay more and more are relying on the private car as theri major means of transportation. describe some of the problems overreliance on cars, causes, and suggest at least one possible solution.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
297 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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