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Some people think that illegal Internet downloads are having a negative effect on the music industry. Others feel that they have little or no impact on artists. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that illegal Internet downloads are having a negative effect on the music industry. Others feel that they have little or no impact on artists. 9g6W

First, would love to say thank you to the internet because of that we can connect to anyone, anywhere in the world easily within a minutes. secondly, I believe not everyone is enough capable to purchase or download the original music albums. Music is for everyone regardless of rich or poor everyone should able to enjoy it does not matter how they going to download it whether its original website or duplicate! Thirdly, at some point there may be some amount of loss in music industry's profit but I do not think there will any effect on artists. for instance, Artist get money because of there art and while composing any music they never think about like this music should be only for rich people. At Last, I strongly believe there will be no effect on artist by illegal internet downloading.

First
, would This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admireadore
love
 to say thank you to the internet This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of that we can connect to anyone, anywhere in the world easily
 within Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a minute" or simply "minutes"?a minuteminutes
a minutes
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterSecondly
secondly
, I believe not everyone is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
 capable to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
 or download the original You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsoulraprockmelodypiecesinging
music
 albums. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsoulraprockmelodypiecesinging
Music
 is for everyone regardless of rich or poor everyone Did you mean "should be able"?should be able
should able
 to enjoy it does not matter how Did you mean "they're going", "they are going", or "they were going"?they're goingthey are goingthey were going
they going
 to download it whether its original website or duplicate! Thirdly
, at This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 point there may be This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 amount of loss in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsoulraprockmelodypiecesinging
music
 industry's profit This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I do not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 there will any effect on artists. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterFor
for
 instance, Artist This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 money This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of there art and while composing any You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsoulraprockmelodypiecesinging
music
 they never This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 about like this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsoulraprockmelodypiecesinging
music
 should be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 for rich This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
.

At Last, I strongly
 believe there will be no effect on artist by illegal internet downloading. 