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Mony peopre think young peopre should foltow troditions. Otheis orgue lhol young peopre should be free to be individuols. Dlicuss bolh yrews.

Mony peopre think young peopre should foltow troditions. Otheis orgue lhol young peopre should be free to be individuols. Dlicuss bolh yrews. ORrA7
It is a highly debatable issue whether the youth should follow traditions or harrc liberty to be what they want. This essay shall look into both sides of the debate before forming an opinbn. There are many reasons why some individuals opine that the youth should follow traditions. The prime reason is that the youth has been neglecting its own very rich culture and traditions in order to adapt to the western ideas. They have their mindset that what the west is doing is right and one should follow it without hesitation. For example, the youth of lndia does not perceive its identity as traditional lndians any more. They think that their centuries old traditions are outdated and prevent modem development. But they should know that nobody likes copy-cats. They should learn from a country like Japan, which is one of the leading economies of the world and also one of the most adwnced countries in terms of modernization, but it still follows and respects its old traditions and cultures. Another reason of people-s opinion is that some traditions are very good and need to be preserved at all costs. For instance, touching the feet of the elderly as a token of respect and welcoming guests with folded hands. on the other hand, it is easy to understand why some people are in favour of htting the youth have their own individuality. This is mainly because the youth of today is better informed than ever before in the history of mankind. They do not just accept things without reasoning. Today, the nations of the world are more closely linked than ever before. lt would be wrong to impose traditions on them, which are obsolete in the modern era. For example, the dowry system, in which the bride's parents gare her gold, money and household items, was acceptable earlier as women were not working, but today dowry system is being condemned because the youth of today realize that it has led to many vices such as female feticide. What is more, today, we are living in a modern world calling for innovation and modemism, which pulls us toward a new vision of traditions; a vision which respects our traditional spirit but which concurrently supports newness and modernity, and promotes making the most of the global village of today. The youth of today are borrowing methods and taking aspirations from one country to the other. For example, the beautiful traditions of The West, such as celebration of Mothe/s Day and Fathe/s Day are being celebrated in lndia today. ln conclusion, it can be said that the youth of today should be allowed all indiviluality. They are not part of a big planet called Earth; they belong to a small global village. Traditions shouH not define them; they should define traditions. lt has been rightly said that Traditions' should be guides and notjailors
It is a
highly
debatable issue whether the
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youth
should
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follow
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traditions
or
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liberty to be what they

want. This essay shall look into both sides of the debate
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before
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opinbn
.

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reasons why
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some
individuals opine that the
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youth
should
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follow
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traditions
. The prime

reason is that the
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youth
has been neglecting its
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own
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very
rich culture and
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traditions
in order to adapt to

the western
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ideas
. They have their mindset that what the west is doing is right and one should
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follow
it

without hesitation.
For example
, the
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youth
of
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lndia
does not perceive its identity as traditional
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lndians
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any more
. They
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think
that their centuries
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old
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traditions
are outdated
and
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prevent
modem development.
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But


they should know that nobody likes copy-cats. They should learn from a country like Japan, which is one

of the leading economies of the world and
also
one of the most
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adwnced
countries in terms of

modernization,
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it
still
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follows
and respects its
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old
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traditions
and cultures. Another reason of
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people
-s

opinion is that
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some
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traditions
are
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very
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good
and need to
be preserved
at all costs.
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, touching

the feet of the elderly as a token of respect and welcoming guests with folded hands.

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on
the other hand, it is easy to understand why
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people
are in
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favour
of
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htting
the
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have their

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own
individuality. This is
mainly
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because
the
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youth
of
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today
is better informed than ever
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before
in the

history of mankind. They do not
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just
accept things without reasoning.
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Today
, the nations of the world are

more
closely
linked than ever
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before
.
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lt
would be
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wrong
to impose
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traditions
on them, which are obsolete

in the modern era.
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, the dowry system, in which the bride's parents
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gare
her gold, money and

household items, was acceptable earlier as women were not working,
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but
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today
dowry system is
being condemned
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because
the
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youth
of
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today
realize that it has led to
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many
vices such as female
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feticide
.

What is more
,
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today
, we are living in a modern world calling for innovation and
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modemism
, which pulls us

toward a new vision of
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traditions
; a vision which respects our traditional spirit
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but
which
concurrently


supports newness and modernity, and promotes making the most of the global village of
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today
. The youth

of
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today
are borrowing methods and taking aspirations from one country to the other.
For example
, the

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beautiful
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traditions
of The West, such as celebration of
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Mothe
/s Day and
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Fathe
/s Day are
being celebrated


in
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lndia
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today
.

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ln
conclusion, it can
be said
that the
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youth
of
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today
should be
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allowed
all
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indiviluality
. They are not part of

a
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big
planet called Earth; they belong to a
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small
global village.
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shouH
not define them; they

should define
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traditions
.
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lt
has been
rightly
said that Traditions' should be guides and
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notjailors
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IELTS essay Mony peopre think young peopre should foltow troditions. Otheis orgue lhol young peopre should be free to be individuols. Dlicuss bolh yrews.

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