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Modifications of the school vicinity

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The picture illustrates the modifications in the construction that took place over the past 25 years. The major change that happened was with the houses near by the secondary school and later with the farmland and the sports field. School, mainroad and the Playground had no movement and they were kept intact. In 1950, the secondary school vicinity had houses, agricultural area and a ground for the kids to play. Almost all the four components occupied the similar land proportions. But there was an upgrade in 1980 and its quite evident that the science has taken a boom and a science block and car parking relaced houses and the farmland. Farmland had turned into sports field where as the houses were wiped off completely and car parking and science block were established. After 12 years further utilisaton of the land took place and the size of sports field and parcial area of the playground was allocated for car parking. The secondary school and the science block remainded untouched. Overall, the whole setup and architecture had taken a turn and modifications took place as per the decade.
The picture illustrates the modifications in the construction that took place over the past 25 years.

The major
change
that happened was with the
houses
near by
the secondary school and later with the farmland and the sports field.

School,
mainroad
and the Playground had no
movement and
they were
kept
intact.

In 1950, the secondary school vicinity had
houses
, agricultural area and a ground for the kids to play.

Almost all the four components occupied the similar land proportions.

But
there was an upgrade in 1980 and its quite evident that the
science
has taken a boom and a
science
block and car parking
relaced
houses
and the farmland.

Farmland had turned into sports field
where as
the
houses
were wiped
off completely and car parking and
science
block
were established
.

After 12 years
further
utilisaton
of the land took place and the size of sports field and
parcial
area of the playground
was allocated
for car parking.

The secondary school and the
science
block
remainded
untouched.

Overall
, the whole setup and architecture had taken a turn and modifications took place as per the decade.
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IELTS essay Modifications of the school vicinity

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186 words
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