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Modern technology is changing our world. This has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication. It also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.3

Modern technology is changing our world. This has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication. It also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. with this statement? v. 3
In this contemporary world, the advancement of technology is altering the world. People are using technology in their daily life for conversations. Information technology has helped people to connect from different parts of the world and the other side of this, it is creating cultural differences between the society. In this essay, I will explain the pros and cons of modernization and finally, give my opinion. On one hand, Twenty First century is earmarked by the development of technology that has changed the life of people entirely ranging from youth to aged people. The benefits of modern technology are a mass. Web development, Mobile apps has helped people to assist things with a press of a button. Additionally, Video calling, group calling, web conference at remote areas have been possible. one gets in touch with their family or friends who are sitting in abroad as and when he wants, whereas this would not have been possible without the development of technology. Furthermore, it has made online business very feasible. E-commerce sites act as a bridge between customers and product owners to sell and buy goods. In short, people can connect to each other with the help of technology. On the other hand, improvements in technology are helping people to a large extent, but they do have disadvantages with them. The most significant one is the mixing of different cultures which has led youth to lose their identity. For example, Westernisation of traditional cultures, which we can see in the growing number of fast food outlets. Moreover, people are not celebrating their own traditional festivals. In other words, modernization of technology has some side effects on the society. In conclusion, I agree to a great extent that technology is bringing people closer together, but people need to very careful that these improvements does not impact their cultures, language and dressing.
In this contemporary world, the advancement of
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technology
is altering the world.
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People
are using
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technology
in their daily life for conversations. Information
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technology
has
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helped
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people
to connect from
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different
parts of the world and the
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other
side of this, it is creating cultural differences between the society. In this essay, I will
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explain
the pros and cons of modernization and
finally
, give my opinion.

On one hand, Twenty
First
century
is earmarked
by the development of
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technology
that has
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changed
the life of
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people
entirely
ranging from youth to aged
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people
. The benefits of modern
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technology
are a mass. Web development, Mobile apps has
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helped
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people
to assist things with a press of a button.
Additionally
, Video calling, group calling, web conference at remote areas have been possible.
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one
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gets
in touch with their family or friends who are sitting in abroad as and when he wants, whereas this would not have been possible without the development of
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technology
.
Furthermore
, it has made online business
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very
feasible. E-commerce sites act as a bridge between customers and product owners to sell and
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buy
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goods
. In short,
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people
can connect to each
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other
with the
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help
of technology.

On the
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other
hand, improvements in
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technology
are helping
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people
to a large extent,
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but
they do have disadvantages with them. The most significant one is the mixing of
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different
cultures which has led youth to lose their identity.
For example
,
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Westernisation
of traditional cultures, which we can
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see
in the growing number of
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fast
food outlets.
Moreover
,
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people
are not celebrating their
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own
traditional festivals. In
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other
words, modernization of
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technology
has
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some
side effects on the society.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
to a great extent that
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technology
is bringing
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people
closer together,
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but
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people
need to
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very
careful that these improvements does not impact their cultures, language and dressing.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Modern technology is changing our world. This has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication. It also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. with this statement? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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