Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Modern people are having more health problems ? What are the causes and what can be the solutions for this?

Modern people are having more health problems? What are the causes and what can be the solutions for this? j9e78
A convenient modern lifestyle brings with it a host of health. Nowadays more and more people are facing problems related to health. There following paragraphs intends to discuss causes related to this and some possible solutions. On the one hand, there are many causes that people ought to face lot of health problems. The primary cause is, increasing pollution. To explain, there are four types of pollution in which air pollution affects our well-being, noise pollution affects our abilities like hearing. people readily become stressed. Keeping in mind the fact that is sedentary lifestyle. Nowdays people constantly being connected due to which most of work is done by sitting through technology which makes them physically unfit and creates lot of health problems. On the other hand there are plethora of solutions to prevent these health problems. The first one is, think positive and focus on gratitude. Research shows that people health is depend upon what they think therefore, always think positive to prevent from health issues. worth-mentioning is the fact that exercise daily. Physical exercise is immensely important for individual to stay healthy and fit. Another one is proper diet, everyone ought to take a proper meal they should set their meal to stay healthy. To sum up, health problems are the problems which is totally depend on humans. People have to take precautions relating to their health.
A convenient modern lifestyle brings with it a host of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
. Nowadays more and more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are facing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
related to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
. There following paragraphs intends to discuss causes related to this and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
possible solutions.

On the one hand, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
causes that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
ought to face
It seems that an article is missing.
lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
. The primary cause is, increasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
, there are four types of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
in which air
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
affects our well-being, noise
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
affects our abilities like hearing.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
people
readily
become
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stressed
. Keeping in mind the fact
that is
sedentary lifestyle.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Nowdays
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
constantly
being connected
due to which
Consider using "most work" or "most of the work".
most of work
is done
by sitting through technology which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them
physically
unfit and creates
It seems that an article is missing.
lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
problems.

On the other hand
there are plethora of solutions to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
problems.

The
first
one is,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
and focus on gratitude. Research
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
is
Consider using a past participle here: "depended".
depend
upon what they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
therefore
, always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
issues.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
worth-mentioning
is the fact that exercise daily. Physical exercise is
immensely
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for individual to stay healthy and fit. Another one is proper diet, everyone ought to take a proper meal they should set their meal to stay healthy.

To sum up,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
are the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
which is
totally
Consider using a past participle here: "depended".
depend
on humans.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
take precautions relating to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Modern people are having more health problems? What are the causes and what can be the solutions for this?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
228 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts