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Some people believe that crime rates among insta is more than other ages. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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it is undeniable that technology has developed both good and bad fields over the past few decades and its impact can be analysed in the behaviour of young people first stopped some individuals claims that crime rates were escalating day by day among teenagers unexpectedly. I was agree with this notion to large extent there are my rates of reason behind increasing crime among teenagers. to begin with, first reason why crime is committed by youngsters. It is dependent on the environment they are living in. It is often seen that in present time parents were busy in their own work. They fail to understand the needs of their children. They may suffer from depression and to heal it is used in does in other activities full stop there is no doubt that Asian parents do not provide much money to their words as they think they will waste it for stop all the sometime they need it. for these reasons the used to store purchase of women and men for stop for instance in my locality and sentence of theft is encountered it was reported in newspaper that an old lady was buying vegetables and she opened her purse to give money to seller. suddenly two young boy with covered face came and one of them snatched purse from her hand. She tries to ran behind them but they were on bike and she was unable to caught them. But with grace of God area was under a security of cameras. An old lady call the police and they checked cameras and noted the number of their vehicle and immediately police things went to different men's tops to caught them finally they were under the police and when they after reason they confront it that they want to to buy some clothes. 2 comments with comma second reasons content shown in movies and television and social media. Most of the youngster just to try them committed a crime as they were unaware about their effects in real life. Parents should pay attention towards it shall they need to spend some time with them and even if they want to watch movies it should be comedy or family based. Beside parents teachers should also sumed young youngsters are aware about the crimes bad impact on our life. To conclude, above discussed are the reasons why crimes rates are increasing among teenagers. It should be tackled within the time otherwise it would be threat to parents as well as their child.
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is undeniable that technology has developed both
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good
and
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fields over the past few decades and its impact can be
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analysed
in the
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behaviour
of young
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first
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stopped
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some
individuals claims that
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crime
rates were escalating day by day among
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teenagers
unexpectedly
. I was
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agree
with this notion to large extent there are my rates of
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reason
behind increasing
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crime
among
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teenagers
.

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to
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begin
with,
first
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reason
why
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crime
is committed
by youngsters. It is dependent on the environment they are living in. It is
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often
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seen
that in present time
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parents
were busy in their
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own
work. They fail to understand the needs of their children. They may suffer from depression and to heal it is
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used
in does in other activities full
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stop
there is no doubt that Asian
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parents
do not provide much money to their words as they
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think
they will waste it for
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stop
all the sometime they need it. for these
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reasons
the
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used
to store
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purchase
of women and
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men
for
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stop
for instance
in my locality and sentence of theft
is encountered
it
was reported
in newspaper that an
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old
lady was buying
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vegetables and
she opened her purse to give money to seller.
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suddenly
two young boy with covered face came and one of them snatched purse from her hand. She tries to
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ran
behind them
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but
they were on
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bike and
she was unable to caught them.
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But
with grace of God area was under a security of cameras. An
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old
lady call the
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police and
they
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checked
cameras and noted the number of their vehicle and immediately police things went to
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different
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men
's tops to caught them
finally
they were under the police and when they after
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reason
they confront it that they want
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to to
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buy
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clothes.

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reasons
content shown in movies and television and social media. Most of the youngster
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just
to try them committed a
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crime
as they were unaware about their effects in real life.
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Parents
should pay attention towards it shall they need to spend
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some
time with them and even if they want to
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watch
movies it should be comedy or family based. Beside
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parents
teachers should
also
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sumed
young youngsters are aware about the
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crimes
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bad
impact on our life.

To conclude
, above discussed are the
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reasons
why
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crimes
rates are increasing among
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
. It should
be tackled
within the time
otherwise
it would be threat to
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parents
as well
as their child.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that crime rates among insta is more than other ages.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
420 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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