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Modern high technology is transforming the way we work and is of benefit to all society. Do you agree or disagree?

It is well known that the innovation of technology change the way how people work, which provides substantial advantages to the community. I certainly agree with the statement that I will explain further in this essay. To commence with, few individuals oppose that technology is unnecessary and addicting to people. They added that it is not beneficial because people can still work efficiently without out. However, I do not believe that this statement is valid because the invention of the latest technology and machinery has increased the overall production rate of many companies. Be it as industrial sector or any other sector in the world. People also say that it is too pricy to invest in modern technology. I disapproved of this statement, the major benefit of ongoing advancement in the field of technology is that it is cost and effective by meeting the demands of people with either higher production or by services that have been much simpler and accessible and the primary reason for this is the invention of computers and artificial intelligence. Furthermore, the continuous evolution of technology is of the utmost importance to humans as it also made communication easy. In fact, the invention of computers, mobile phones, and the internet has turned out to be a boon for mankind. Remembering, how e-mails have transformed the way we used to communicate officially of with our near and dear ones. What is more, it allows us to save time and effort. For instance, things that took hours or even days to be done earlier can now be completed in matters of minutes or seconds. To summarize, I would conclude that the impact of technology on humans is beneficial. It provides a lot of convenience to people. Quite apart from the benefits of this innovation to our daily lives, it has another function: it allows us to widen our horizon, meet new friends and establish camaraderie. Can you afford to miss the opportunity to explore the world without moving out away from the comfort of your home? Precisely not!
It is well known that the innovation of
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technology
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change
the way how
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people
work, which provides substantial advantages to the community. I
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agree
with the statement that I will
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explain
further
in this essay.

To commence with, few individuals oppose that
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technology
is unnecessary and addicting to
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people
. They
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added
that it is not beneficial
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because
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people
can
still
work
efficiently
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without out
.
However
, I do not believe that this statement is valid
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because
the invention of the latest
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technology
and machinery has increased the
overall
production rate of
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many
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companies
. Be it as industrial sector or any other sector in the world.
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People
also
say that it is too
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pricy
to invest in modern
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technology
. I disapproved of this statement, the major benefit of ongoing advancement in the field of
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technology
is that it
is cost
and effective by meeting the demands of
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people
with either higher production or by services that have been much simpler and accessible and the primary reason for this is the invention of computers and artificial intelligence.

Furthermore
, the continuous evolution of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
is of the utmost importance to humans as it
also
made communication easy. In fact, the invention of computers, mobile phones, and the internet has turned out to be a boon for mankind. Remembering, how e-mails have transformed the way we
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used
to communicate
officially
of with our near and dear ones.
What is more
, it
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allows
us to save time and effort.
For instance
, things that took hours or even days to
be done
earlier can
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now
be completed
in matters of minutes or seconds.

To summarize
, I would conclude that the impact of
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technology
on humans is beneficial. It provides
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a lot of
convenience to
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people
. Quite apart from the benefits of this innovation to our daily
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lives
, it has another function: it
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allows
us to widen our horizon,
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meet
new friends and establish camaraderie. Can you afford to miss the opportunity to explore the world without moving out away from the comfort of your home?
Precisely
not!
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IELTS essay Modern high technology is transforming the way we work and is of benefit to all society.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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