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In some area of us , Curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particluar time in night unless they accompanied by an adult? whats your opinion about it?

In recent times, there has been tremendous increase in the crimes rates which in turn resulting in measures like ‘ Curfew’ after a particular time for adolscents. While some might argue that Young people need not to be accompanied by adults in night, I strongly feel that presence of guardians around definitely makes the difference in terms of saving teenagers from drug dealers and safety from thefts. To begin with, people who are in their young age are generally considered to be the soft targets for Drug dealers. This is because these people are open to experiment in the name of enjoyment and might not think about the consequences, thus making them a easy prey for dealers roaming around in the night. If these kids will be accompanied by someone who is mature enough, there are less chances of kids falling for Drugs. In contrast, if unaccompanied, teenagers might try these substance and get addicted to it. Thus, presence of an adult is of utmost importance with the childrens’ especially when they get out. In addition to that, Grown-ups are also required to be with young-ones to safeguard them against any unforseenable incident such as theft. Teenagers are genereally not strong physically, might get abused when someone tries to steal from them. If they are surrounded by their parents, there will be likely that such incidents happens. For instance, Young girls can be easily man-handled sometimes but if their father is around no one will try to think about it also. Moreover, Sometimes these confrontations become violent leading to a permanent damage. In conclusion, Although it looks little ironical for adults to be with teenagers, In my opinion it is a wonderful step taken to protect them from untoward incidence such as Drug-abuse and theft.
In recent times, there has been tremendous increase in the crimes rates which in turn resulting in measures like ‘ Curfew’ after a particular time for
adolscents
. While
some
might
argue that Young
people
need not to
be accompanied
by adults in night, I
strongly
feel that presence of guardians around definitely
makes
the difference in terms of saving
teenagers
from drug dealers and safety from thefts.

To
begin
with,
people
who are in their young age are
generally
considered to be the soft targets for Drug dealers. This is
because
these
people
are open to experiment in the name of enjoyment and
might
not
think
about the consequences,
thus
making them
a
easy prey for dealers roaming around in the night. If these kids will
be accompanied
by someone who is mature
enough
, there are
less
chances of kids falling for Drugs.
In contrast
, if unaccompanied,
teenagers
might
try
these substance
and
get
addicted to it.
Thus
, presence of an adult is of utmost importance with the
childrens
especially
when they
get
out.

In addition
to that, Grown-ups are
also
required to be with young-ones to safeguard them against any
unforseenable
incident such as theft.
Teenagers
are
genereally
not strong
physically
,
might
get
abused when someone tries to steal from them. If they
are surrounded
by their parents, there will be likely that such incidents happens.
For instance
, Young girls can be
easily
man
-handled
sometimes
but
if their father is around no one will try to
think
about it
also
.
Moreover
,
Sometimes
these confrontations become violent leading to
a permanent damage
.

In conclusion
, Although it looks
little
ironical for adults to be with
teenagers
, In my opinion it is a wonderful step taken to protect them from untoward incidence such as Drug-abuse and theft.
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IELTS essay In some area of us, Curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particluar time in night unless they accompanied by an adult? whats your opinion about it?

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