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Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging has brought more disadvantages than advantages to people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging has brought more disadvantages than advantages to people’s lives. aEPwG
I agree that modern communications have had a negative impact on us, but I also believe that we have benefited much from them. There is no denying that modern methods of communication have begun to bring disadvantages to people. Firstly, frequent online communication can have a bad effect on our health. Our vision can deteriorate and dizziness and insomnia can also occur. Secondly, privacy issues have emerged. From phone signal interceptions to social media hacking, we are all now concerned about our private information. And finally, our social skills may decrease as we have become less and less likely to go out and communicate with people in person. But at the same time, I also believe that modern methods of communication have brought us many positive aspects. For example, now we can easily communicate with people even if they are far away from us. In addition, we can now even study online through various platforms such as Zoom or Microsoft Teams. Next, modern communication methods have improved significantly, now we can send audio messages, photos, videos, and even create a group chat. Moreover, online communication has helped to eliminate the cultural gap. Now people from different countries can communicate with each other and exchange their views and ideas. Thus, although modern methods of communication have made our life more convenient and comfortable, we should not rely on them. We need to properly allocate our time and spend more time off the screen. With rational use, we can gain benefits and avoid many disadvantages.
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have begun to bring disadvantages to
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, frequent online
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can have a
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bad
effect on our health. Our vision can deteriorate and dizziness and insomnia can
also
occur.
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, privacy issues have emerged. From phone signal interceptions to social media hacking, we are all
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now
concerned about our private information. And
finally
, our social
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skills
may decrease as we have become less and less likely to go out and communicate with
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people
in person.

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at the same time, I
also
believe that
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aspects.
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we can
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people
even if they are far away from us.
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, we can
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even study online through various platforms such as Zoom or Microsoft Teams.
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communication
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we can
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send
audio messages, photos, videos, and even create a group chat.
Moreover
, online
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communication
has
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helped
to eliminate the cultural gap.
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people
from
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different
countries can communicate with each other and exchange their views and
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ideas
.

Thus
, although
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modern
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methods
of
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communication
have made our life more convenient and comfortable, we should not rely on them. We need to
properly
allocate our time and spend more time off the screen. With rational
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use
, we can gain benefits and avoid
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disadvantages.

IELTS essay Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging has brought more disadvantages than advantages to people’s lives.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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