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Mobile phones should be allowed in school.

Mobile phones should be allowed in school. 0ldLQ
Mobile phones should be allowed in school. Because use mobile phones for access internet to study English and make me listen and pronounce easy, it can help we study more subject. Use mobile phone in class teacher can give we the lesson in the phone easy we we don't need books anymore and we can do home work in it. But I think use phone in class is not good, because student can play game or sulf web but you don’t know they play. They will search the internet how to do this lesson, how to do that lesson. . . They don’t understand your lesson and they can’t answer your question, they can’t do their extra and their parent can sad and ill. They will be nervous their parent and they don’t study your lesson. There are the reason not good to use mobile phone in the class.
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for access internet to study English and
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make
me listen and pronounce easy, it can
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help
we study more subject.
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in
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teacher can give we the
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in the
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easy
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anymore and
we can do home work in it.

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you don’t know they play. They will search the internet how to do this
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, how to do that
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lesson and
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will be nervous their
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they don’t study your lesson.

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IELTS essay Mobile phones should be allowed in school.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
149 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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