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Memorising facts is the most important way to succeed in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.4

Memorising facts is the most important way to succeed in education. with this statement? v. 4
One of the traditional methods in which students can use to learn something is remembering. Although it is necessary, I believe that the learner needs to combine as many methods as they can in studying to get a higher score. A psychology teacher named Marc Smith says: "The more you repeat the thing you want to learn, the stronger the connection between the neurons of the brain become". Memorisation therefore can be a foundation of learning. Then, they can get higher thinking which helps them perform better in the exam. That is a reason I can understand why some people think that learner must commit facts or amount of things to their memory. In others perspective, if people who are in education do not understand the given knowledge, they can easily forget it. Thus, what is the point of learning? Remembering is just the first thing and they need to do more things for their studying desire. They must know exactly what is the thing they are taught. For instance, English students can memorize the word: Deception but they do not understand when they can use it and they fail. A learner has to have practical application and the capability of solving problems with their knowledge. In conclusion, memorization is essential in teaching and learning. However, it is not the most important thing which people must do to get a higher result in school and university. The most crucial step for successful learning is trying to study in many different methods and find their own way.
One of the traditional methods in which students can
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use
to learn something
The verb 'remembering' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
is remembering
. Although it is necessary, I believe that the learner needs to combine as
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many
methods as they can in studying to
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get
a higher score.

A psychology teacher named Marc Smith says:
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"
The more you repeat the thing you want to learn, the stronger the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
connection between
the neurons of the brain become
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
.
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Memorisation
therefore
can be a foundation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
. Then, they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
higher thinking which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
them perform better in the exam.
That is
a reason I can understand why
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some
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people
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think
that learner
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must
commit facts or amount of things to their memory.

In others perspective, if
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people
who are in education do not understand the
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given
knowledge, they can
easily
forget it.
Thus
, what is the point of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
? Remembering is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
the
first
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thing and
they need to do more things for their studying desire. They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
know exactly what is the thing they
are taught
.
For instance
, English students can memorize the word: Deception
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but
they do not understand when they can
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use
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
it and
they fail. A learner
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has to
have practical application and the capability of solving problems with their knowledge.

In conclusion
,
Do not mix variants of the same word ('memorization' and 'memorisation') within a single text.
memorization
is essential in teaching and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
.
However
, it is not the most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
thing which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
do to
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get
a higher result in school and university. The most crucial step for successful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
is trying to study in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
methods and find their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
way.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Memorising facts is the most important way to succeed in education. with this statement? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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