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Famous people have attracted more attention from the media rather than usual people so it would not spend much time for normal people. I believe a person who becomes well-known has a talent that is why they have the right to be covered by the media. Not media pay attention to famed people even people tent to them. I think the reason may be is that they are likable or people themselves are interested in understanding about them. For example, Cristiano Ronaldo is a symbol of secesful person and media show him a lot that people learn them. On the other hand, cammon people get ignored and nobody knows about them. For instance if media introduce them with their skills they would be discovered and this leads to motivate usual people. Therefore media is responsible for normal people to pay more attention to them. In conclusion, famous or popular person have tried to become known and they have invested in their job, also have spent their time and have practiced for singing or acting or becoming a professional footballer as well. So, they must see the reward and the result of their skills.

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get
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ignored
 and nobody knows about them. For instance
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media
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skills
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 and this leads to motivate usual You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
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famous
 or popular person have tried to become Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).known, and
known and
 they have invested in their job, also
 have spent their time and have practiced for singing or acting or becoming a professional footballer as well
. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
, they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 the reward and the result of their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
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