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Undoubtedly as long time, media has played great role in informing society and improving level of knowledge walks of people. But a question is currently aroused attention of society whether media are worried about accuracy of news less than they do the past due to increasing effect of political party. Although there are different opinion in this regard and some advocate the statement and others contradict with ones. as far as I am concerned I will disagree with the statement. I feel this ways for following reason. To begin with, Nowadays keeping popularity of media are paramount important than the past. For one thing, analyzing media revenue indicates that advertising is main parts of their earning that its amount heavily depends on media reputation. It means that higher reputation media have more subscribers. Hence huge companies and famous businessman tend more to introduce products in these media. Since publishing any fake information not only adversely influence on media reputation but is also reduce their revenues due to decreasing trustless of customers, it is common that they worry about correctness of information more than the past. for another thing, nowadays with help of technology, internet access and social network become pervasive. hence any fiction information are rapidly identified by competitors and others and suddenly lead to huge loss or even media bankrupt Another noteworthy point of current argument is that nowadays there is more enforcing law that guarantees accuracy of information. According to effect of information on different walks of people, government intensively monitors on media contents. Because fake information pose threat to national security and it may lead to conflict among ethnicities who living a region. personal experience is merit example in this area. Few years ago, a fake news publishing on official newspaper cause to fight two kind of ethnicity Put in nutshell, above mentioned, it can be inferred that media are more concerned about information accuracy because of keeping reputation and more enforcing law.
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as long time,
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has played great role in informing society and improving level of knowledge walks of
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.
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But
a question is
currently
aroused attention of society whether
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media
are worried
about accuracy of news less than they do the past due to increasing effect of political party. Although there are
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different
opinion in this regard and
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some
advocate the statement
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and others
contradict with ones.
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as
far as I
am concerned
I will disagree with the statement. I feel
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this
ways for following reason.

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begin
with, Nowadays keeping popularity of
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media
are paramount
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important
than the past. For one thing, analyzing
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media
revenue indicates that advertising is main parts of their earning that its amount
heavily
depends on
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media
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reputation
. It means that higher
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reputation
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media
have more subscribers.
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Hence
huge
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companies
and
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famous
businessman tend more to introduce products in these
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media
. Since publishing any fake
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information
not
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only
adversely
influence on
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media
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reputation
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but
is
also
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reduce
their revenues due to decreasing
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trustless
of customers, it is common that they worry about correctness of
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information
more than the past.
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for
another thing, nowadays with
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help
of technology, internet access and social network become pervasive.
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hence
any fiction
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information
are
rapidly
identified by competitors
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and others
and
suddenly
lead to huge loss or even
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media
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bankrupt


Another noteworthy point of
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current
argument is that nowadays there is more enforcing law that guarantees accuracy of
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information
. According to effect of
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information
on
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different
walks of
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people
,
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government
intensively
monitors on
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media
contents.
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Because
fake
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information
pose threat to national security and it may lead to conflict among ethnicities who living a region.
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personal
experience is merit example in this area. Few years ago, a fake news publishing on official newspaper cause to fight two
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kind
of ethnicity

Put in nutshell, above mentioned, it can
be inferred
that
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are more concerned about
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information
accuracy
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because
of keeping
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reputation
and more enforcing law.
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IELTS essay media has played great role in informing society and improving level of knowledge walks of people.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
326 words
5.5
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