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Me before you movie review task 1

Me before you movie review task 1 6KVXG
Louis Clark is a young, active and happy girl. She has to change jobs one by one for her family. But one day, when Clark became caregiver for Will Treynor, young and rich, who is bottom dead by a car accident. Will Treynor was happy man and he had a girl friend before. But, after accident, his girl friend married his best friend. Nevertheless, when Clark reach his home, her happy mood affects both of them. Eventually, they become closer to each other. Alternatively, they fall in love each other. That said, they never said openly that fall in love each other. This is the key point of the whole movie. Unfortunately, Treynor choose to end his life(Suicide) in Switzerland. Because hospital in Switzerland supplying for commit suicide are legal. However, Clark don’t prevent due to this is wish of Treynor. But, before he die, Treynor said Clark “ I want to have a cup of coffee with you in Paris ”. After say that, he die. Conclusion, Louis Clark went to the Paris and she drink coffee alone with beautiful dress.
Louis Clark is a young, active and happy girl. She
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has to
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change
jobs one by one
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for


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her
family.
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But
one day, when Clark became caregiver for Will
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Treynor
, young and rich,

who is bottom dead by a car accident. Will
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Treynor
was happy
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man
and he had a girl
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friend


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before
.
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But
, after accident, his girl friend married his best friend.
Nevertheless
, when Clark

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reach
his home, her happy mood affects both of them.
Eventually
, they become closer to

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each
other.
Alternatively
, they fall in
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love
each other. That said, they never said
openly
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that


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fall
in
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love
each other. This is the key point of the whole movie. Unfortunately,
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Treynor


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choose
to
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end
his life(Suicide) in Switzerland.
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Because
hospital in Switzerland
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supplying


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for
commit suicide are legal.
However
, Clark don’t
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prevent
due to this is wish of
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Treynor
.

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But
,
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before
he
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die
,
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Treynor
said Clark
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“
I want to have a cup of coffee with you in Paris ”.

After say that, he
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die
. Conclusion, Louis Clark went to the
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Paris and
she
The pronoun 'she' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "drinks", "drank".
drink
coffee alone

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with
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beautiful
dress.
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IELTS essay Me before you movie review task 1

Essay
  American English
12 paragraphs
182 words
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