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Material success and frame are often attributed to some talent do you think that it is possible to get name Fame and money even if there is no talent

Material success and frame are often attributed to some talent do you think that it is possible to get name Fame and money even if there is no talent bM2l
everyone wish is to to be like a successful and aiming to become something special which can give the Fame and become identical for others in order to be a successful talent is key characteristic without it success and fame can't be achieved however some people argues that without talent someone can be successful or be a fame by own luck or I am completely disagree with this point of you success and fame it's not like a gift this should not achieved by any shortcut in order to be a successful individual should be clear with the goals and should have a specific road map to achieve it by giving own best. Sachin Tendulkar who known as god of cricket he was very cleared with with own goal to be a cricketer from childhood he followed a specific road map by joining Cricket Academy and given best performance and he selected at age of 18 in in cricket team so he gain talent first and then he implement it and he played in lots of matches and created unbeatable records for India and for own. By this he is now called as god of cricket moreover not only talent and hard work but also positive attitude towards your goals is a key point in order to get a success or Fame while trying to achieve your goals in some scenarios you will not get the success in the single trial at this stage some people are getting disappointed and decides to leave goals MS Dhoni who who was the cricketer for India team who has also decided to be a cricketer by follow to Sachin Tendulkar. he decided to become cricketer by watching Sachin Tendulkar playing cricket from the Indian team. however h he did not selected for a team in a first trial but he did not lose own self confidence he did more practice and later on his selected in the state level tournaments over there he proved own self as a star by giving own best performance he created unbeatable records which attracted the selectors again to select in the national team. finally he got selected in the national team unlikely few people argue that without talent you will also be a successful or become fame and you can earn money by using your own luck such people argues that success can't be achieved if you have a bad luck people can achieve a success of money by purchasing the lottery tickets and trying on luck. they said that this is the easiest way to become a millionaire using your luck search people argues that a person's who born in the royal family who get everything without any talent or doing any hard work and become a fan from the childhood only like a royal family of some of the kingdoms like England and Kuwait and Arab countrie different search thinking because it does it matter if you are lucky or not if you are the farm from the birth but however in order to keep it maintain you need talent. if not then there are chances that search status can be lost. what are the examples for such is Ambani's family which have a two sons elder brother is is now become a loser where younger brother becomes a millionaire of the India to conclude I would definitely say that with talent and positive attitude, individual can gain and maintain Fame money, and become a successful in the life
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everyone
wish is
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be like a
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successful
and aiming to
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become
something special which can give the
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Fame
and
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become
identical for others in
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order
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successful
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talent
is key characteristic without it
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fame
can't
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some
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people
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talent
someone can be
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successful
or be a
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fame
by
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own
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luck or
I am completely
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success
and
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fame
it's not like a gift this should not
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achieved
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successful
individual should be
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with the
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goals
and should have a specific road map to achieve it by giving
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own
best.
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Sachin
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Tendulkar
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who known
as god of
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cricket
he was
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very
cleared
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with with
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own
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goal
to be a cricketer from childhood he followed a specific road map by joining
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Cricket
Academy and
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given best
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performance and
he
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selected
at age of 18
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in in
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cricket
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team
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so
he
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gain
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talent
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first and
then he implement
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it and
he played in lots of matches and created unbeatable records for India and for
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own
. By this he is
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now
called as god of
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cricket


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moreover
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talent
and
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work
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also
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positive
attitude towards your
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goals
is a key point in
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order
to
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get
a
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success
or
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Fame
while trying to achieve your
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goals
in
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some
scenarios you will not
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get
the
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success
in the single trial at this stage
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some
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people


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are
getting disappointed and decides to
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leave
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goals
MS
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Dhoni
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who
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who
was the cricketer for India
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team
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who
has
also
decided to be a cricketer by follow to
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Sachin
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Tendulkar
.
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he
decided to
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become
cricketer by watching
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Sachin
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Tendulkar
playing
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cricket
from the Indian
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team
.
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however
h he did not
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selected
for a
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team
in a
first
trial
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but
he did not lose
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own
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self confidence
he did more practice and later on his
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selected
in the state level tournaments over there he proved
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own
self as a star by giving
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own
best performance he created unbeatable records which attracted the selectors again to select in the national
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team
.
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finally
he
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got
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selected
in the national
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team


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unlikely
few
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people
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argue
that without
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talent
you will
also
be a
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successful
or
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become
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fame
and you can earn money by using your
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own
luck such
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people
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argues
that
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success
can't
be achieved
if you have a
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bad
luck
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people
can achieve a
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success
of money by purchasing the lottery tickets and trying on luck.
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they
said that this is the easiest way to
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become
a millionaire using your luck search
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people
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argues
that a person's
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who
born in the royal family
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who
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get
everything without any
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talent
or doing any
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hard
work and
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become
a fan from the childhood
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only
like a royal family of
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some of the
kingdoms like England and Kuwait and Arab
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countrie
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different
search thinking
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it does it matter if you are lucky or not if you are the farm from the birth
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but
however
in
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order
to
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keep
it maintain you need
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talent
.
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if
not then there are chances that search status can
be lost
.
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what
are the examples for such is
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Ambani
's family which have a two sons elder brother
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is is
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now
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become
a loser where younger brother
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becomes
a millionaire of the
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India


to conclude
I would definitely say that with
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talent
and
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positive
attitude, individual can gain and maintain
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Fame
money, and
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become
a
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successful
in the life

IELTS essay Material success and frame are often attributed to some talent do you think that it is possible to get name Fame and money even if there is no talent

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
583 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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