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Many University ststudents live with their Families while other live away from home because University are in different places.

Many University ststudents live with their Families while other live away from home because University are in different places. QRbBb
On the one hand, there are Several benefits of living with family. Firstly, We live without any worry at home. For example, In home we Share our Problems with our family members. we enjoy a healthy food which is home mad and full of hygenic. There is no doubt about the quality of food. Last year, my friend who was living in the hostel face the problem of food Poisoning. when he checked by doctor the doctor asked that this problemis caused by due to the impure or bad quality of the food. In home we enjoy different festivals with our family members or relatives. we enjoy the facilities of home. Secondly, we pay full heed to our study. For instance, Last year my friend took admission in university of Engineering and Technology Lahore. He lived there in a hostel. He adopt a bad company and spend all his time in different activities. So, he did not pay full heed to their studies and failed in the examination. On the other hand, there are many drawbacks of living in home. Firstly, we cannot how to live independently. For example, we are not so much carefull in home. we are not attentive in home. We cannot build our confidence level. We cannot get knowledge about different places and different activities. We cannot how to judge or how to deal with the people and talk with the people by living in the home.
On the one hand, there are Several benefits of
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living
with family.
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without any worry at home.
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, In home we Share our Problems with our family members.
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we
enjoy a healthy
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food
which is home mad and full of
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hygenic
. There is no doubt about the quality of
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food
. Last year, my friend who was
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living
in the hostel face the problem of
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food
Poisoning.
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when
he
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checked
by doctor the doctor asked that this
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problemis
caused by due to the impure or
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bad
quality of the
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food
. In
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home we
enjoy
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different
festivals with our family members or relatives.
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we
enjoy the facilities of home.
Secondly
, we pay full heed to our study.
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, Last year my friend took admission in university of Engineering and Technology Lahore. He
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lived
there in a hostel. He
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adopt
a
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bad
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company
and spend all his time in
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different
activities.
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, he did not pay full heed to their studies and failed in the examination.
On the other hand
, there are
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drawbacks of
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living
in home.
Firstly
, we cannot how to
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independently
.
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much
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carefull
in home.
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we
are not attentive in home. We cannot build our confidence level. We cannot
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get
knowledge about
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different
places and
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different
activities.
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We
cannot how to judge or how to deal with the
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people
and talk with the
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people
by
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IELTS essay Many University ststudents live with their Families while other live away from home because University are in different places.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
241 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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