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It is common nowadays to hear people decrying the number of choices people have relative to the past and proclaiming the drawbacks of so many easily-available options in a variety of areas of life.

It is common nowadays to hear people decrying the number of choices people have relative to the past and proclaiming the drawbacks of so many easily-available options in a variety of areas of life. kWry2
The main reason why increased choice is considered a negative development is that it makes life more complicated. Take, for example, the number of products people can choose from today. Supermarkets are filled with different brands with hardly any meaningful differences. This can cause people to waste time and energy making choices with little actual impact. This is also the case when it comes to online streaming services like Netflix, Hulu and HBO. Not only do people have to spend time researching these sites, but once they make a choice, they are limiting what they will be able to watch in the future. If they decide to subscribe to all of them, suddenly they will be paying upwards of $40 a month for basic viewing content. These are a couple of ways in which choice can take up time and make life more complex. Although choice introduces a level of complexity to life, the main benefit is that it opens up options for people outside dominant cultural trends. The best example of this is the changes that have taken place in the music industry over the last 20 years with the advent of iTunes and streaming services. In the past, the big pop acts dominated the radio and album sales. Now the music scene is much more fractured. This makes it more difficult for some artists but also opens up the possibility that you can find a niche of music that you and some other people love. This has been replicated in other areas like podcasting, painting, and film as well. People can find what interests them outside of what major companies are trying to push. That is why increased choice is positively taken as a whole. In conclusion, the drawbacks of increased choice do not outweigh the advantages gained by allowing people to explore what interests them the most. In the future, this will continue and present challenges but also allow for a more diverse cultural experience for rich and poor alike, all over the world.
The main reason why increased
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choice
is considered
a
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negative
development is that it
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makes
life more complicated. Take,
for example
, the number of products
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people
can choose from
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today
. Supermarkets
are filled
with
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different
brands with hardly any meaningful differences. This can cause
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people
to waste time and energy making
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choices
with
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little
actual impact. This is
also
the case when it
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comes
to online streaming services like Netflix, Hulu and HBO. Not
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only
do
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people
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have to
spend time researching these sites,
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but
once they
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make
a
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choice
, they are limiting what they will be able to
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watch
in the future. If they decide to subscribe to all of them,
suddenly
they will be paying upwards of $40 a month for basic viewing content. These are a couple of ways in which
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choice
can take up time and
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make
life more complex.

Although
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choice
introduces a level of complexity to life, the main benefit is that it opens up options for
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people
outside dominant cultural trends. The best example of this is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
that have taken place in the music industry over the last 20 years with the advent of iTunes and streaming services. In the past, the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
pop acts dominated the radio and album sales.
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Now
the music scene is much more fractured. This
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makes
it more difficult for
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some
artists
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but
also
opens up the possibility that you can find a niche of music that you and
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some
other
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people
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love
. This has
been replicated
in other areas like podcasting, painting, and film
as well
.
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People
can find what interests them
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outside of
what major
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companies
are trying to push.
That is
why increased
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choice
is
positively
taken as a whole.

In conclusion
, the drawbacks of increased
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choice
do not outweigh the advantages gained by allowing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to explore what interests them the most. In the future, this will continue and present challenges
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
for a more diverse cultural experience for rich and poor alike, all over the world.
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IELTS essay It is common nowadays to hear people decrying the number of choices people have relative to the past and proclaiming the drawbacks of so many easily-available options in a variety of areas of life.

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