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Many students work while studying. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working while you study?

Nowadays students are so much hardworking that they want to do as much activities as they can. There are many youngsters who work part time while they are still at school. Working part time presents students all the difficulties and acquaintances in real world but it also prevents them from getting involved in various extra-curricular activities at school. This essay will discuss advantages and disadvantages of working part time. Working while at school offers many advantages to the students. They gain a lot of knowledge about what adults’ life is like, which problems they may face and so on. Moreover, it teaches them of self- discipline and responsibility as they have to manage the time between work and school which is very important skill to master for the future successes. On the other hand, there are an enormous number of disadvantages of working part time. Working means to immense into something specific and not to be torn for everything in one time. This may deteriorate their focus and affect their school performance. For instance, they might have an important exam at their school and stressful situation at work. In such situations it becomes intricate to concentrate on either of them. Students who work regularly also miss out on school activities and competitions or even childhood. This can prevent them of getting unforgettable moments spent with their peers. In conclusion, working while studying has its advantages that helps students to experience more in life. However, all these youngsters also lose many childhood activities. It is always important to weight up all pros cons before finding a job in such a young age.
Nowadays
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much hardworking that they want to do as
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activities
as they can. There are
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youngsters who
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work
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time
while they are
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school
.
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part
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time
presents
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students
all the difficulties and acquaintances in real world
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also
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prevents
them from getting involved in various extra-curricular
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activities
at
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school
. This essay will discuss advantages and disadvantages of
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working
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part time
.

Working while at
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offers
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advantages to the
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students
. They gain
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a lot of
knowledge about what adults’ life is like, which problems they may face and
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on.
Moreover
, it teaches them of self- discipline and responsibility as they
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have to
manage the
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time
between
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and
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school
which is
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skill
to master for the future successes.

On the other hand
, there are an enormous number of disadvantages of
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working
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part
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time
.
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Working
means to immense into something specific and not to
be torn
for everything in one
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time
. This may deteriorate their focus and affect their
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school
performance.
For instance
, they might have an
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important
exam at their
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school
and stressful situation at
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work
. In such situations it becomes intricate to concentrate on either of them.
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Students
who
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work
regularly
also
miss out on
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school
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activities
and competitions or even childhood. This can
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prevent
them of getting unforgettable moments spent with their peers.

In conclusion
,
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working
while studying has its advantages that
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helps
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students
to experience more in life.
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childhood
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activities
. It is always
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to weight up all pros cons
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before
finding a job in such a young age.
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IELTS essay Many students work while studying. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working while you study?

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271 words
6.0
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