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Many students pick their own routes in school and university; some prefer to focus solely on their studies, while others choose to work part-time.

Many students pick their own routes in school and university; some prefer to focus solely on their studies, while others choose to work part-time. VyLlw
Many students pick their own routes in school and university; some prefer to focus solely on their studies, while others choose to work part-time. Focusing on learning is the proper thing to do at this age because learning is the major duty. You can obtain experience in college by joining groups and attending seminars. In comparison, finding a part-time work outside of school isn't a bad idea either. Students will learn skills that they would not have learned in school. You can meet people from various sectors and gain more real-world experience. Both provide unique field experiences. Furthermore, time is a factor to consider while deciding between full-time study and part-time work. Students who study full-time have more time to focus on their homework. As a result, because they don't have any other distractions, most full-time students can accomplish greater results than part-time students. However, we must consider another issue: incomes. Part-timers can relieve parental stress while also allowing them to spend money on items they want. Obviously, this allows them to live a more comfortable life than students who are studying full-time. If students study full-time in a wealthy household, their income has little bearing on their education; but, for poor families, this is a significant obstacle.
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skills
that they would not have learned in school. You can
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meet
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from various sectors and gain more real-world experience. Both provide unique field experiences.
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can accomplish greater results than part-time
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.
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consider another issue: incomes. Part-timers can relieve parental
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study
full-time in a wealthy household, their income has
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bearing on their education;
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, for poor families, this is a significant obstacle.

IELTS essay Many students pick their own routes in school and university; some prefer to focus solely on their studies, while others choose to work part-time.

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