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Many students leave their home country after graduation.why is this happening?does it advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

Many students leave their home country after graduation. why is this happening? does it advantages outweigh its disadvantages? QwgPL
Shifting to a foreign country has seen a dramatic rise and has become a trend in the past few years which is a matter of concern. students go to foreign mainly because of better job opputunities. its advantages does not outweigh its disadvantages which will be explicated in the subsequent paragraphs. To embark upon, students go to abroad to search for better job and business oppurtunities. for example-many students want to go to canada, usa, australia because their currency is powerful than indian currency and there are better job oppurtunities too and a better lifestyle. In addition to this, foreign companiee provide better packages and handsome salaries to lure the youth. india has the most number of youngsters but unfortunately, most of them want to settle in foreign because of better lifestyle and facilities. to examplify, if a student gets 10 lakh rupees per annum package in india and in foreign he/she gets 12 lakh and health cover with guarunteed holidays, it will be a no brainer to go to abroad. On the flip side, the economy of the nation will struggle as old age population cannot work as efficiently as youth. young blood is important for a country's growth. foreign companies lure the india's youth by providing them high salaries in juxtaposition to india's salary and better job oppurtunities. To conclude, living in foreign country or in india has its own benefits and drawbacks. if one lives in india he she can look after his friends and family. if he she lives in abroad one can make their lifestyle better with better job oppurtunities and lifestyle.
Shifting to a
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country has
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seen
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students
go to
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foreign
mainly
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because
of
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better
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job
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opputunities
.
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its
advantages
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does
not outweigh its disadvantages which will
be explicated
in the subsequent paragraphs.

To embark upon,
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students
go
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to abroad to
search for
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better
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job
and business
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oppurtunities
.
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for
example-
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many
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students
want to go to
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canada
,
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usa
,
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australia
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because
their currency is
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powerful
than
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indian
currency and there are
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better
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job
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oppurtunities
too and a
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better
lifestyle.

In addition
to this,
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foreign
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companiee
provide
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better
packages and handsome salaries to lure the youth.
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india
has the most number of youngsters
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but
unfortunately, most of them want to settle in
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foreign
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because
of
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better
lifestyle and facilities.
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to
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examplify
, if a
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student
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gets
10 lakh rupees per annum package in
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india
and in
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foreign
he/she
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gets
12 lakh and health cover with
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guarunteed
holidays, it will be a
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no brainer
to
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go to abroad
.

On the flip side, the economy of the nation will struggle as
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old
age population cannot work as
efficiently
as youth.
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young
blood is
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important
for a country's growth.
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foreign
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companies
lure the
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india
's youth by providing them high salaries in juxtaposition to
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india
's salary and
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better
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job
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oppurtunities
.

To conclude
, living in
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foreign
country or in
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india
has its
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own
benefits and drawbacks.
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if
one
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lives
in
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india
he she can look after his friends and family.
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if
he she
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lives
in abroad one can
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make
their lifestyle
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better
with
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better
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job
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oppurtunities
and lifestyle.
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IELTS essay Many students leave their home country after graduation. why is this happening? does it advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
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