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Only long distance flight consumes fuel which a car uses in several year's time, but they cause same amount of pollution. So some people think that we should discourage non-essential flights, such as tourist travel, rather than to limit the use of ca v.2

Only long distance flight consumes fuel which a car uses in several year's time, but they cause same amount of pollution. So some people think that we should discourage non-essential flights, such as tourist travel, rather than to limit the use of ca v. 2
Modern lifestyle and the global trade have caused using higher number of aircrafts for travel compared the usage of them in the past. Given that notion, some believe that modern people should continue using airplanes even for short distances rather than traveling in private or public cars. However, I disagree with this perspective, believing that people should use cars for traveling short distances since they are emitting less amount of pollution. To start with, aircrafts, most of which are giant, produce higher amount of pollution particles. They consume a hefty amount of fuel which are emitted to the atmosphere. For short distances, for example fewer than 200 kilometres, these airplanes are not fully occupied and they often travel with fewer than half of their full capacity. This contributes to producing higher amount of pollution than emitted from cars which are significantly smaller and would transport in their full passenger capacity. Additionally, passenger vehicles have the option of hybrid fuel consumption, emitting less amount of carbon dioxide to the environment, not only because of this option but they are also more packed and smaller. Buses are the best means of transport for short distances and more environmentally friendly than aircrafts. Some of the public vehicles consume natural gas as their fuel which produces less amount of greenhouse gases. Furthermore, buses are usually travelled in their full passengers capacity, resulting in emission of less amount of pollution compared to aircrafts. In conclusion, I think choosing cars, especially public vehicles, for traveling short distances sounds more environmentally friendly than using airplanes, since airplanes are considerably larger and not being full of passengers which bring about more pollution.
Modern lifestyle and the global trade have caused using higher number of
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aircrafts
for travel compared the usage of them in the past.
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Given
that notion,
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some
believe that modern
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people
should continue using
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airplanes
even for
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short
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distances
rather
than traveling in private or public
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cars
.
However
, I disagree with this perspective, believing that
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people
should
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use
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cars
for traveling
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short
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distances
since they are emitting
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less
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amount
of pollution.

To
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start
with,
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aircrafts
, most of which are giant, produce higher
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amount
of
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pollution
particles. They consume a hefty
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amount
of fuel which
are emitted
to the atmosphere. For
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short
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distances
,
for example
fewer than 200
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kilometres
, these
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airplanes
are not
fully
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occupied and
they
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often
travel with fewer than half of their
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full
capacity. This contributes to producing higher
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amount
of
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pollution
than emitted from
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cars
which are
The extreme adjective for small is "tiny", or "minimal".
significantly smaller
and would transport in their
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full
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passenger
capacity.

Additionally
,
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passenger
vehicles have the option of hybrid fuel consumption, emitting
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less
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amount
of carbon dioxide to the environment, not
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only
because of this
option
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but
they are
also
more packed and smaller. Buses are the best means of transport for
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short
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distances
and more
environmentally
friendly than
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aircrafts
.
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Some of the
public vehicles consume natural gas as their fuel which produces
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less
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amount
of greenhouse gases.
Furthermore
, buses are
usually
travelled in their
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full
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passengers
capacity, resulting in emission of
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less
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amount
of
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pollution
compared to
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aircrafts
.

In conclusion
, I
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think
choosing
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cars
,
especially
public vehicles, for traveling
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short
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distances
sounds more
environmentally
friendly than using
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airplanes
, since
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airplanes
are
considerably
larger and not being
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full
of
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passengers
which bring about more
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pollution
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay Only long distance flight consumes fuel which a car uses in several year's time, but they cause same amount of pollution. So some people think that we should discourage non-essential flights, such as tourist travel, rather than to limit the use of ca v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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