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Many school going children this days on own phones.

Many school going children this days on own phones. 7LWKX
Advantages and disadvantages of a development. ! In recent years, smart phone has become an assemtial device for a most pepole. Many adults use smart phone in various ways. Additionally, children who attend the school have their own smart phones, they can easily find out information which helps children to study deeply. On the other side, it doesn't give student not only advantages but also disadvantages. It causes serious problems, so many parents worry about students who own smartphones. After smartphones become common devices to students, they can easily contact to their family. Furthermore, many applications have been come out these days for presenting the student's location to parents. One article which I saw last year, because of application, which show student's location, they could find their children if they don't go academies or school Many people argue that smartphone is vital device these days. It improves people's lives, as well as technologies. Investors still have developed smart phones in various ways for better lifestyles. However, we should be careful not to addict on smartphones. This is a very difficult situation. They might cause serious problems to people, especially school-aged students. We should make alternatives to protect children from addiction of smart phones. In my opinion bring significant changes in our life o mitigate the problems related to mobile, parents should make some rules on the usage timing. Guardian should also keep an eye on the kids that what kind of things they are watching. With the help of rules and regulations we can address this problem.
Advantages and disadvantages of a development. !

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children
who attend the school have their
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, they can
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children
to study
deeply
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student
not
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parents worry about
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students
who
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own
smartphones. After smartphones become common devices to
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students
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contact to their family.
Furthermore
,
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applications have been
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out these days for presenting the student's location to parents. One article which I
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last year,
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of application, which
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student's location, they could find their
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children
if they don't go academies or
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school


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people
argue that smartphone is vital device these days. It
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,
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still
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phones
in various ways for better lifestyles.
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, we should be careful not to addict on smartphones. This is a
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difficult situation. They might cause serious
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people
,
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students
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alternatives to protect
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children
from addiction of
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smart
phones.

In my opinion bring significant
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changes
in our life o mitigate the
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problems
related to mobile, parents should
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on the usage timing. Guardian should
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an eye on the kids that what kind of things they are watching. With the
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and regulations we can address this
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IELTS essay Many school going children this days on own phones.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
257 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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