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Many school going children these days have their own mobile phone. write advantages and disadvantages of this development.

Many school going children these days have their own mobile phone. write advantages and disadvantages of this development. EdL6q
Nowadays, even children have mobiles and it has many advantages and disadvantages. It is very important to have a mobile phone in morden era beacause nowadays mobiles are needed everywhere. Secondly, smart phones provide a chance to be always connected with family and friends. Let's take Whatsapp as an example, it is providing a facility to be with loved ones whenever required. Other side smart phones give many advaance level faselity and some time mobile phone time saveing equipment so there are many benefit. Audio, video calls, live meetings, online class, massages and even media can be shared with ease. At time of emergency it is easy to reach family and madicel services. Some children using mobile for study. At time of emergency it is easy to reach family and madicel service. Thirdly, many several reasons why parents provide mobile phones to their children such as many parente use mobiles to teach children and so many parents evengive children to play. Although mobile phones haves some constraints, I believe it is very important for children to have one if it is not misused. Mobile kids suffer a lot such as mobile also damage their eyes. On the other hand, excessive use in mobile for entertainment, suffering, playing games and many other activity. Conclusively, mobile in all problems in the spiritn comes in very use but for the master times, the future of the children is spoiled in the future beacause of coures of children, instead of working, it is wasting time in activity like a mobile.
Nowadays, even
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have mobiles and it has
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advantages and disadvantages. It is
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important
to have a mobile
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phone
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morden
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beacause
nowadays mobiles
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everywhere.

Secondly
, smart
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phones
provide a chance to be always connected with family and friends.
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's take
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Whatsapp
as an example, it is providing a facility to be with
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loved
ones whenever required. Other side smart
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phones
give
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many
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advaance
level
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faselity
and
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some
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time
mobile
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phone
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time
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saveing
equipment
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so
there are
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many benefit
. Audio, video calls,
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live
meetings, online
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class
, massages and even media can
be shared
with
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ease
. At
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time
of emergency it is easy to reach family and
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madicel
services.
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Some
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children
using mobile for study. At
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time
of emergency it is easy to reach family and
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madicel
service.

Thirdly
,
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many
several reasons why parents provide mobile
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phones
to their
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children
such as
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many
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parente
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use
mobiles to teach
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children
and
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so
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many
parents
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evengive
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children
to play. Although mobile
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phones
haves
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some
constraints, I believe it is
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very
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important
for
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children
to have one if it is not misused. Mobile kids suffer a lot such as mobile
also
damage their eyes.
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, excessive
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use
in mobile for entertainment, suffering, playing games and
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many
other activity.

Conclusively
, mobile in all problems in the
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spiritn
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comes
in
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very
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use
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for the master
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times
, the future of the
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children
is spoiled
in the future
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beacause
of
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coures
of
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children
,
instead
of working, it is wasting
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time
in activity like a mobile.
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IELTS essay Many school going children these days have their own mobile phone. write advantages and disadvantages of this development.

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4 paragraphs
256 words
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