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Many people who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them. What are the problems related to this? What are some possible solutions

Many people who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them. What are the problems related to this? What are some possible solutions 2max
People who work as a caretaker is a hectic work. They usually feels that they neglecting their duties. In my opinion society must learning the people to volunteer and help the caretaker. The main problem that the nurse has many patients to visit and do not have enough time. People who have dementia or life-threating must have extra care for the nutritious food. Al zahmeris's patients also, can go out and forget the way of their house, their name and family. All of these patients must have extra care. IN addition, at the emergency they did not have a chance to call the emergency to help them, so they need caretakers for this all patients to be with the elderly people and aide them with everything. The society did not help the elderly people nor the caretakers. The government can obligate the high school to help the elderly people as a volunteer this will be a good solution. They also can do a plenty of nurse caring place which everyone have a suitable number of patients can survive them. Moreover, they can give the people who work at the nurse caring many benefits, so many people will thinking to work as a caretakers. IN conclusion, elderly people need extra care and time for aide them with all their needs of the day. They also must have the attention of the society for helping them and provide them all social needs.
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as a caretaker is a hectic
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work
. They
usually
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that
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their duties. In my opinion society
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must
learning the
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people
to volunteer and
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help
the caretaker.

The main problem that the nurse has
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many
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patients
to visit and do not have
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enough
time.
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People
who have dementia or
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life-threating
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must
have extra care for the nutritious food. Al
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zahmeris
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patients
also
, can go out and forget the way of their
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house
, their name and family. All of these
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patients
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must
have extra care.
IN addition
, at the emergency they did not have a chance to call the emergency to
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help
them,
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so
they
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need
caretakers for this all
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patients
to be with the
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elderly
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people
and aide them with everything.

The society did not
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help
the
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elderly
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people
nor the caretakers. The
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government
can obligate the high school to
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help
the
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elderly
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people
as a volunteer this will be a
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good
solution. They
also
can do a
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plenty
of nurse caring place which everyone
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have
a suitable number of
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patients
can survive them.
Moreover
, they can give the
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people
who
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work
at the nurse caring
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many
benefits,
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so
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many
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people
will thinking to
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work
as
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a caretakers
.

IN conclusion
,
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elderly
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people
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need
extra care and time for aide them with all their
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needs
of the day. They
also
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must
have the attention of the society for helping them and provide them all social
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needs
.
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IELTS essay Many people who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them. What are the problems related to this? What are some possible solutions

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