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Many people use social media on regular basis in order to keep in touch with the news and with other people. Do you think that the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Many people use social media on regular basis in order to keep in touch with the news and with other people. Do you think that the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
It is true that almost multitudes of the whole world have been influenced by social networking and they used it to keep in touch with news and with other masses, on the daily basis. This essay will hash out the merits and demerits of this statement in upcoming paragraphs and give my opinion in the conclusion. To commence with social media denotes good effect on the masses since with the help of social sites, individuals can easily up to date with society. It is a fast way to get knowledge about any topic. The person can get general knowledge and study related to specific education from social media. People can get knowledge regarding new vogue, new laws, government's new facilities and new researches in a moment. Furthermore, social media assists multitudes to make new friends on social sites as well as people can easily find their older friends on these kind of sites and also keep in touch with their near and dear ones those who live far from them or in other nations. Moreover, a person can become famous personality in social media and make their career brighter. For instance, nowadays, Facebook and tic-tac is more popular around the world. People like to show talent on these sites by posting their talented vendors which assist them to become popular among the population of the globe. However, some disadvantages of using social media are also available. Sometimes use of social media becomes useless and wastage of time. Social networking sites also rendered games and some masses spend their quality time playing online games with their friends that do not have any meaning for their success. In addition to this, sometimes social media show fake news, which distract the individuals. Some individuals disrespect someone by using these type of sites. To encapsulate it, after elaborating both the perceptions, it is concluded that pros of social media are far higher from its cons. Therefore, people should stay contacted with social apps, but only for good things.
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been influenced
by
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social
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networking and
they
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used
it to
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keep
in touch with
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news
and with other masses, on the daily basis. This essay will hash out the merits and demerits of this statement in upcoming paragraphs and give my opinion in the conclusion.

To commence with
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social
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media
denotes
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good
effect on the masses since with the
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help
of
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social
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sites
, individuals can
easily
up to date with society. It is a
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fast
way to
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get
knowledge about any topic. The person can
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get
general knowledge and study related to specific education from
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social
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media
.
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People
can
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get
knowledge regarding
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new
vogue,
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new
laws,
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government
's
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new
facilities and
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new
researches in a moment.
Furthermore
,
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social
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media
assists multitudes to
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make
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new
friends on
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social
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sites
as well
as
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people
can
easily
find their older friends on
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these kind
of
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sites
and
also
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keep
in touch with their near and dear ones those who
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live
far from them or in other nations.

Moreover
, a person can become
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famous
personality in
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social
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media
and
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make
their career brighter.
For instance
, nowadays, Facebook and
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tic-tac
is more popular around the world.
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People
like to
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show
talent on these
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sites
by posting their talented vendors which assist them to become popular among the population of the globe.

However
,
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some
disadvantages of using
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social
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are
also
available.
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Sometimes
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use
of
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becomes useless and wastage of time.
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networking
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sites
also
rendered games and
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some
masses spend their quality time playing online games with their friends that do not have any meaning for their success.
In addition
to this,
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sometimes
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social
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show
fake
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news
, which distract the individuals.
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Some
individuals disrespect someone by using these type of sites.

To encapsulate it, after elaborating both the perceptions, it
is concluded
that pros of
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social
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media
are far higher from its cons.
Therefore
,
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people
should stay contacted with
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social
apps,
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but
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only
for
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good
things.
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37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people use social media on regular basis in order to keep in touch with the news and with other people. Do you think that the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
334 words
6.5
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