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Many people think we have to focus on the extinction of certain animal species, while others think we should pay attention to the problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many people think we have to focus on the extinction of certain animal species, while others think we should pay attention to the problems of human beings. 7lY3
A lot of individuals suggest that strong emphasis should be laid on the total eradication of specific animals, whereas there are contradictions by others who feel we should attend to human problems. I will enlighten you below with the most realistic reasons on these opinions. Few people believe that animals such as; Elephants, Dinosaurs and Lions to mention a few are a threat to the world, and if for any reasons they are found in an environment or if they escape from the zoo, nearby communities will suffer great loss and possibly death. This is because Elephants are so big and can crush a building just by stomping it’s feet on one. Lions on the other hand are carnivorous and will eat as much living things as possible. Hence the reason for their total extinction. On the other hand, a lot of people believe that humans have too many issues that should be looked into instead of interrupting it with an irrelevant matter such as the extinction of specific animals. These group of people capitalize on the fifty one percentage of people living in abject poverty in Africa, who the government should assist with; employments, standard medical centers, good roads, electricity, water and monthly or yearly support income to mention a few. In my opinion, more emphasis should be laid on human problems than the extinction of species. I believe that we should all channel our energy towards; the reduction of excessive child birth, child neglect, education, human trafficking, electricity, water, medical centers and security for humans to mention a few, than the extinction of some animal species. In conclusion, I will give an example from the yearly increase in morality rate due to hunger and lack of standard hospitals which are lead by over population abd government neglect.
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individuals suggest that strong emphasis should
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on the total eradication of specific
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animals
, whereas there are contradictions by others who feel we should attend to
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human
problems. I will enlighten you below with the most realistic reasons on these opinions.

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people
believe that
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animals
such as; Elephants, Dinosaurs and Lions to mention a few are a threat to the world, and if for any reasons they
are found
in an environment or if they escape from the zoo, nearby communities will suffer great loss and
possibly
death. This is
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because
Elephants are
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so
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big
and can crush a building
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just
by stomping
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it’s
feet on one. Lions
on the other hand
are carnivorous and will eat as much living things as possible.
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Hence
the reason for their total extinction.

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,
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a lot of
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people
believe that
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humans
have too
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many
issues that should
be looked
into
instead
of interrupting it with an irrelevant matter such as the extinction of specific
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animals
. These group of
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people
capitalize on the
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fifty one
percentage of
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people
living in abject poverty in Africa, who the
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government
should assist with; employments, standard medical centers,
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good
roads, electricity, water and monthly or yearly support income to mention a few.

In my opinion, more emphasis should
be laid
on
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human
problems than the extinction of species. I believe that we should all channel our energy towards; the reduction of excessive child birth, child neglect, education,
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human
trafficking, electricity, water, medical centers and security for
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humans
to mention a few, than the extinction of
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some
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animal
species.

In conclusion
, I will give an example from the yearly increase in morality rate due to hunger and lack of standard hospitals which are lead by over population
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abd
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government
neglect.
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IELTS essay Many people think we have to focus on the extinction of certain animal species, while others think we should pay attention to the problems of human beings.

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299 words
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