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Many people think that public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their money on expensive hi-tech media, such as software, DVDs or videos. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Many people think that public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their money on expensive hi-tech media, such as software, DVDs or videos. v. 2
Nowadays, a library refers not only borrowing book, but also free access to electronic resource and computer. Some people opine that libraries are providing too much emphasis on hi-tech media and they feel it's not necessary. Modernization is, in my opinion, an inevitable tendency, the public libraries could attract youths as well as have an advanced effect, by having the option of lending latest technological media. One of the main advantages of using computers or other hi-tech products is improving efficiency. It simplifies the search of information and resources for the users rather than going through hardcopy books which in turn utilizes time-consuming. The search can be done with a click of a button and access to different sources of information. For instance, videos and DVDs function as a visual means to assist people to have a first-hand experience even though those people have not physically visited or seen the objects which are introduced in the books. Thus, it is obvious that the idea of providing a platform and spending resources for technological media is completely necessary. Furthermore, magnetic and digital media can store information much longer than traditional means. It takes great care to protect books from moisture, fire or human damage, and a book in a library serves readers for only a few hundred years. In contrast, digital files, easily duplicated and restored, can perhaps last forever. Especially, with immense storage capacity, these new high – tech media can free up enormous amounts of physical space. As more libraries convert their collections to digital, they’re able to preserve historical items for future use. Overall, the usage of library resources for hi-tech media should be encouraged extensively. In conclusion, I believe that in order to serve their main purpose and survive in this new age, libraries must evolve and invest in new technologies. It is predicted that future of libraries lies in the hands of technology and if sufficient efforts are not made, they may lose their standing.
Nowadays, a library refers not
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only
borrowing
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book
,
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but
also
free access to electronic
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resource
and computer.
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Some
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people
opine that libraries are providing too much emphasis on hi-tech
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media and
they feel it's not necessary. Modernization is, in my opinion, an inevitable tendency, the public libraries could attract youths
as well
as have an advanced effect, by having the option of lending
A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".
latest
technological media.

One of the main advantages of using computers or other hi-tech products is improving efficiency. It simplifies the search of information and resources for the users
rather
than going through
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hardcopy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
which in turn utilizes time-consuming. The search can
be done
with a click of a button and access to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
sources of information.
For instance
, videos and DVDs function as a visual means to assist
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to have a
first
-hand experience
even though
those
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have not
physically
visited or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
the objects which
are introduced
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
.
Thus
, it is obvious that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of providing a platform and spending resources for technological
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
is completely necessary.

Furthermore
, magnetic and digital
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
can store information much longer than traditional means. It takes great care to protect
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
from moisture, fire or human damage, and a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
in a library serves readers for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a few hundred years.
In contrast
, digital files,
easily
duplicated and restored, can perhaps last forever.
Especially
, with immense storage capacity, these new high
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
tech
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
can free up enormous amounts of physical space. As more libraries convert their collections to digital, they’re able to preserve historical items for future
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.
Overall
, the usage of library resources for hi-tech
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
should
be encouraged
extensively
.

In conclusion
, I believe that in order to serve their main purpose and survive in this new age, libraries
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
evolve and invest in new technologies. It
is predicted
that future of libraries lies in the hands of technology and if sufficient efforts are not made, they may lose their standing.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people think that public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their money on expensive hi-tech media, such as software, DVDs or videos. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
8.5
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