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Many people think technological devices such as smart phones, tablets and mobile phones bring more disadvantages than advantages. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

A large number of people say that technological inventions such as smart phones, pads and mobile phones make more negative impacts than benefits. I absolutely disagree with this statement and I consider that the benefits outweigh the negatives. My reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs. Firstly, technological inventions are made to make facilities for humans and to make life easier. Now, every individual has its own electronic devices, and we can not imagine our modern life without them. Indeed, electronic devices help us to keep in touch with other people whether we live far from them. For example, there are several types of applications on smart phones to help us to communicate with others no matter how far from us. Additionally, I usually use WhatsApp application on my smart phone to talk with my relatives who live in Russia. Furthermore, modern society use some facilities on technological devices to facilitate their life, and one of the most common convenience is that people can buy everything what ever they want by online shops. If someone has electronic devices such as smart phones, he will be able to do shop through the internet without going outside. Most of the people in Uzbekistan use this facility and they economize their time. In conclusion, gadgets are made to satisfy humans needs and to make life easier. I strongly agree that technological devices bring more benefits than its downsides.
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Firstly
,
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technological
inventions
are made
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make
facilities for humans and to
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make
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life
easier.
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electronic
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devices
, and we can not imagine our modern
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life
without them.
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, electronic
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devices
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help
us to
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keep
in touch with other
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people
whether we
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live
far from them.
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smart
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phones
to
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help
us to communicate with others no matter how far from us.
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usually
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use
WhatsApp application on my
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phone
to talk with my relatives who
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live
in Russia.

Furthermore
, modern society
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some
facilities on
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technological
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devices
to facilitate their
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life
, and one of the most common
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convenience
is that
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people
can
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buy
everything what ever they want by online shops. If someone has electronic
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devices
such as
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smart
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phones
, he will be able to do shop through the internet without going outside. Most of the
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people
in Uzbekistan
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use
this
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facility and
they economize their time.

In conclusion
, gadgets
are made
to satisfy humans needs and to
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make
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life
easier. I
strongly
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agree
that
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technological
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devices
bring more benefits than its downsides.
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IELTS essay Many people think technological devices such as smart phones, tablets and mobile phones bring more disadvantages than advantages.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
236 words
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