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in the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying

Nowadays, technology plays a big role in our life. I believe in the extent that many people will be focusing more to their phone in the future. Therefore, there will be pros and cons about people who are willing to read online than print newspapers or books. Firstly, I think online readers will be more than offline because they do not have to pay, so it will be more profitable for them. Next, they will feel more comfortable because I am sure that they will bring their phones everywhere they go, so they can just open their phones and read them easily. On the other hand, not every newspapers or books can read by people without connect the wi-fi. Thus, people cannot read them wherever they are. Moreover, it will be hard for those who do not know about how to read them in their phones. Furthermore, people have to pay the fee of newspapers, and they often have to be a member, so they can get the newspapers regularly. However, I personally think that people will have the most updated news on the internet. They will keep updated if they searched in online. One of the reason why I said that people can have the most updated news by searching online is printed newspapers have a long process, from typing until delivering. I am sure that it will be wasting time and people who want to get news quickly they will search online and not waiting for the printed one. In conclusion, it will be advantages and disadvantages for both of them and it depends on the decision that people made, whether they will be waiting for printed newspapers or read by online.
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role in our life. I believe in the extent that
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many
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people
will be focusing more to their
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phone
in the future.
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people
who are willing to
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online than
print
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newspapers
or books.

Firstly
, I
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think
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online
readers will be more than offline
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because
they do not
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have to
pay,
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so
it will be more profitable for them.
Next
, they will feel more comfortable
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because
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phones
everywhere they go,
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so
they can
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open their
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them
easily
.

On the other hand
, not every
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newspapers
or books can
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by
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people
without connect the
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wi-fi
.
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cannot
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them wherever they are.
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, it will be
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for those who do not know about how to
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them in their
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phones
.
Furthermore
,
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people
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newspapers
, and they
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be a member,
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regularly
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However
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personally
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that
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people
will have the most updated news on the internet. They will
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keep
updated if they searched in
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online
. One of the reason why I said that
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people
can have the most updated news by searching
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online
is printed
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newspapers
have a long process, from typing until delivering. I am sure that it will be wasting time and
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people
who want to
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get
news
quickly
they will search
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online
and not waiting for the printed one.

In conclusion
, it will be advantages and disadvantages for both of
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them and
it depends on the decision that
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people
made, whether they will be waiting for printed
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newspapers
or
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read
by
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online
.
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IELTS essay in the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
284 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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