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Many people think advertisements are not useful for customers while others think that they are important for customers. Give your opinion. v.2

Many people think advertisements are not useful for customers while others think that they are important for customers. Give your opinion. v. 2
Advertisement has been used since immemorial times (OR form time immemorial) to promote businesses, but ad campaigns seem to have proliferated lately. In this regard, critics propound that advertisement is futile for customers, but there are many who convincingly refute it, as they believe that advertising is proving efficacious and helpful to customers in multiple/ numerous/ variety of ways; hence with this dissenting opinion, we see emerging a new discourse. To be candid, I (am of the advocate/ corroborate) that ad campaigns are not only helping to create awareness among customers; they are also a prime source of revenue for publishers of mass media like newspapers, TV channels, magazines, websites, so on. Firstly, advertisements are helping to create awareness among customers about availability of any particular product or service in the market. Almost every day new products are being introduced in market or previously existing products making improvements as well. In such dense market, where competition among brands is high, advertisement tends to convey the people why an advertised product or service is superior to other alternatives currently available in market; as a result, ads influence customer’s choice to a great extent. Additionally, it informs a customer, mainly about; various features, benefits, price and use of an advertised product or service. Secondly, advertising has a remarkable ability to reach masses and educate the society. Therefore, many governments and even Non-Governmental Organizations (NGO) often take help of advertisements to reach and educate people on important social issues. In this regard, Diamer-Bhasha dam campaign is a stark example, which is run by the government to create awareness among people about the imminent scarcity of water in Pakistan. With this campaign, the government has not only succeeded to educate people, but also been able to raise billions of rupee in donations for dam construction. In conclusion, pivotal role played by advertisements in our society cannot be ignored as they not only create awareness among people, but also help educate people about social issues.
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has been
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used
since immemorial times (OR form time immemorial) to promote businesses,
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but
ad
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campaigns
seem to have proliferated lately. In this regard, critics propound that
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advertisement
is futile for
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customers
,
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but
there are
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many
who
convincingly
refute it, as they believe that advertising is proving efficacious and helpful to
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customers
in multiple/ numerous/ variety of ways;
hence
with this dissenting opinion, we
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see
emerging a new discourse. To be candid, I (am of the advocate/ corroborate) that ad
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campaigns
are not
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only
helping to
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create
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awareness
among
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customers
; they are
also
a prime source of revenue for publishers of mass media like newspapers, TV channels, magazines, websites,
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so
on.

Firstly
,
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advertisements
are helping to
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create
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awareness
among
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customers
about availability of any particular
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product
or service in the
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market
. Almost every day new
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products
are
being introduced
in
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market
or previously existing
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products
making improvements
as well
. In such dense
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market
, where competition among brands is high,
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advertisement
tends to convey the
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people
why an advertised
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product
or service is superior to other alternatives
currently
available in
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market
;
as a result
, ads influence
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customer’s
choice to a great extent.
Additionally
, it informs a
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customer
,
mainly
about; various features, benefits, price and
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use
of an advertised
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product
or service.

Secondly
, advertising has a remarkable ability to reach masses and
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educate
the society.
Therefore
,
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many
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governments
and even Non-Governmental Organizations (NGO)
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often
take
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help
of
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advertisements
to reach and
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educate
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people
on
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important
social issues. In this regard,
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Diamer-Bhasha
dam
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campaign
is a stark example, which
is run
by the
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government
to
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create
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awareness
among
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people
about the imminent scarcity of water in Pakistan. With this
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campaign
, the
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government
has not
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only
succeeded to
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educate
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people
,
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but
also
been able to raise billions of rupee in donations for dam construction.

In conclusion
, pivotal role played by
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advertisements
in our society cannot be
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ignored
as they not
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only
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create
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awareness
among
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people
,
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but
also
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help
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educate
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people
about social issues.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people think advertisements are not useful for customers while others think that they are important for customers. Give your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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