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Many people these days have computer, laptops, and telephones at their home for work. Do you think, working from home has more advantages or disadvantages? Give reasons. v.2

Many people these days have computer, laptops, and telephones at their home for work. Do you think, working from home has more advantages or disadvantages? Give reasons. v. 2
The technology is becoming cheaper and convenient every day. It is argued by a significant number of individuals that a lot of people do carry electronic gadgets like laptop, telephones at their home for work purpose. In my opinion, duties done back at home have many advantages for the organization as well as for the worker. To begin with, work from home has many benefits to the employer in terms of financial goals. Employees sitting at home for work can save money for their organization in various ways. For instance, the travelling cost from home to office and back will not be applicable in employer budget because employees will not come to the office daily. Secondly, the huge expenditure of office assets like an office building, furniture and stationery will be directly eliminated because these special things are not required anymore as a separate entity. Similarly, work from home has many profits for employees as well in terms of supporting a family. A person who opts to work at home can give his family more time and supports family members whenever they need by helping them in various activities during their breaks from work. For instance, dropping children to schools and bring material from the supermarket. All these small activities give a sense of satisfaction to all family members including employee, as a result, they can maintain a balance between personal and professional life easily. In conclusion, jobs carried at home rather than at outdoor office results numerous benefits to employees and their bosses. In future, it is believed that technology will completely change this trend of the outdoor office into indoor home work stations.
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by a significant number of individuals that
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a lot of
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people
do carry electronic gadgets like laptop, telephones at their home for
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purpose. In my opinion, duties done back at home have
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many
advantages for the organization
as well
as for the worker.

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begin
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work
from home has
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many
benefits to the employer in terms of financial goals.
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Employees
sitting at home for
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work
can save money for their organization in various ways.
For instance
, the travelling cost from home to
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office
and back will not be applicable in employer budget
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because
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employees
will not
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come
to the
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office
daily.
Secondly
, the huge expenditure of
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office
assets like an
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office
building, furniture and stationery will be
directly
eliminated
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because
these special things are not required anymore as a separate entity.

Similarly
,
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work
from home has
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many
profits for
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employees
as well
in terms of supporting a
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family
. A person who opts to
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work
at home can give his
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family
more time and supports
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family
members whenever they need by helping them in various activities during their breaks from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
.
For instance
, dropping children to schools and bring material from the supermarket. All these
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small
activities give a sense of satisfaction to all
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family
members including
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employee
,
as a result
, they can maintain a balance between personal and professional life
easily
.

In conclusion
, jobs carried at home
rather
than at outdoor
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office
results numerous benefits to
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employees
and their bosses.
Did you mean: "In the future"?
In future
, it
is believed
that technology will completely
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change
this trend of the outdoor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
into indoor home
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
stations.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people these days have computer, laptops, and telephones at their home for work. Do you think, working from home has more advantages or disadvantages? Give reasons. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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