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World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership So for peace to prevail female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership To what extent do you agree or disag v.6

World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership So for peace to prevail female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership 6
The human history has been violence and conflict-stricken since the beginning of the human existence. If we look back in history or to the world around us, we see wars, conflict, power struggles and revolutions, peace making kings, prudent emperors and ruthless rulers. History also reveals that society has always been predominantly male dominated, with leaders and rulers mainly being men. It is, hence, easy to blame the ruler and put the responsibility of atrocities on the shoulders of men. But a deeper perspective always reveals to historians that conflict is a generic tendency of humans. So peace being disturbed is not the liability of men only, but humans in general, and a power shift, from men to women, is destined to be futile in prevailing peace. Most of the women who are known to be great till date, e. g. Queen Isabella of Spain, Queen Mary, a. k. a. Bloody Mary, Victoria, and Elizabeth of Britain, all have ruled over a vast spectrum of power. And they often have done so ruthlessly, achieving goals with an iron hand. They have waged wars that are barely comparable to only a few of those devised by men. These women are not anomalies of history, but examples from numerous others, who went beyond the boundaries of gender in the path of prevailing in power while expanding peace whenever they deemed it to be expandable. The two greatest wars of modern history, World Wars I & II, have taught us that wars are impersonal. Race, religion, nationality, sex are only pretences to the universally human lust for power. It is true that during both the global conflicts men were in the rulers’ thrones. But it will be foolish to say that Margaret Thatcher, the famed Iron Lady who spared no road against a minnow enemy in the war of Falkland, would be more peacefully diplomatic than how the greats Winston Churchill and Franklyn D. Roosevelt had been tackling the Axis of Hitler. The gender issue is only a determinant in the battle of the sexes, not the battles among nations and peoples. It is therefore, impertinent, if not irrational, to conclude that world conflicts result from the rule of a particular gender and the finer sex would do a better job at prevailing peace if selectively put at the helm of human nations.
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human
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existence. If we look back in
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history
or to the world around us, we
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see
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wars
,
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conflict
,
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power
struggles and revolutions,
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peace
making kings, prudent emperors and ruthless
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rulers
.
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History
also
reveals that society has always been
predominantly
male dominated, with leaders and
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rulers
mainly
being
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men
. It is,
hence
, easy to blame the
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ruler
and put the responsibility of atrocities on the shoulders of
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men
.
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But
a deeper perspective always reveals to historians that
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conflict
is a generic tendency of
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humans
.
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So
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peace
being disturbed
is not the liability of
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men
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only
,
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but
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humans
in general
, and a
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power
shift, from
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men
to women,
is destined
to be futile in prevailing peace.

Most of the women who
are known
to be great till date,
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Queen Isabella of Spain, Queen Mary, a. k. a. Bloody Mary, Victoria, and Elizabeth of Britain, all have ruled over a vast spectrum of
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power
. And they
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often
have done
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so
ruthlessly
, achieving goals with an iron hand. They have waged
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wars
that are
barely
comparable to
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only
a few of those devised by
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men
. These women are not anomalies of
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history
,
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but
examples from numerous others, who went beyond the boundaries of gender in the path of prevailing in
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power
while expanding
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peace
whenever they deemed it to be expandable.

The two greatest
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wars
of modern
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history
, World
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Wars
I
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&amp
; II, have taught us that
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wars
are impersonal. Race, religion, nationality, sex are
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only
pretences to the
universally
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human
lust for
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power
. It is true that during both the global
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conflicts
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men
were in the
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rulers’
thrones.
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But
it will be foolish to say that Margaret Thatcher, the famed Iron Lady who spared no road against a minnow enemy in the
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war
of Falkland, would be more
peacefully
diplomatic than how the greats Winston Churchill and
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Franklyn
D. Roosevelt had been tackling the Axis of Hitler.

The gender issue is
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only
a determinant in the battle of the sexes, not the battles among nations and peoples. It is
therefore
, impertinent, if not irrational,
to conclude
that world
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conflicts
result from the
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rule
of a particular gender and the finer sex would do a better job at prevailing
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peace
if
selectively
put at the helm of
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human
nations.
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44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership So for peace to prevail female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership 6

Essay
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4 paragraphs
390 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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