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Many people say the gap between rich and poor people is wider, as rich people become richer and poor people grow poorer.

Many people say the gap between rich and poor people is wider, as rich people become richer and poor people grow poorer. Wndbb
In the modern world, it is often said that the growing disparity between the wealth and the poor while others might think that the rich get richer and the poor get poorer. This essay will shed light on both views before giving the author’s option. On the one hand, the considerable rising gap between rich and poor states. First, the currency barrier made it difficultly for them to be friends. In fact, the rich often have a higher standard of living and spending, while those who live in families without conditions are always struggle to put food on the table. Moreover, the more different the educational and learning environment, the more different they are. Childrens who live in abundance life are offered a lot of opportunities to learn and exchange cultures from international school than children who attend in the remote schools, which is reason why they often have different views in social aspects of life. On the other hand, other group of people think that there are the rich become wealthier and the poor vice versa. First and foremost, their career development opportunities are completely opposite. Obviously, the affluent people filled with conditions to cultivate knowledge and easily get a high-paying job thanks to what they learn or who enter the family. On the contrary, people who live below the poverty line have fever opportunities to move ahead of life. Besides, the vicious cycles of poverty make they have to face financial and social problems. However, in today's society there are still many poor people who overcome difficulties and become affluent and even richer than many others. Starbucks boss Howard Schultz, for instance, is someone who overcame fate to become the owner of more than 16, 000 Starbucks stores worldwide. In conclusion, the more developed society, the larger the gap between the poor and the rich. I personally believe that everyone should strive to become better whether rich or poor, and people should close this gap between us because we have the same rights.
In the modern world, it is
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said that the growing disparity between the wealth and the
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while others might
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rich
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get
richer and the
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poor
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poorer. This essay will shed light on both views
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before
giving the author’s option.

On the one hand, the considerable rising gap between
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rich
and
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poor
states.
First
, the currency barrier made it
difficultly
for them to be friends. In fact, the
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rich
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often
have a higher standard of living and spending, while those
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who
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live
in families without conditions are always struggle to put food on the table.
Moreover
, the more
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different
the educational and learning environment, the more
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different
they are.
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Childrens
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who
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live
in abundance life
are offered
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a lot of
opportunities to learn and exchange cultures from international school than children
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who
attend in the remote schools, which is reason why they
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often
have
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different
views in social aspects of life.

On the
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hand,
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other
group of
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people
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think
that there are the
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rich
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become
wealthier and the
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poor
vice versa.
First
and foremost, their career development opportunities are completely opposite.
Obviously
, the affluent
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people
filled with conditions to cultivate knowledge and
easily
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get
a high-paying job thanks to what they learn or
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who
enter the family.
On the contrary
,
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people
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who
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live
below the poverty line have fever opportunities to
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move
ahead of life.
Besides
, the vicious cycles of poverty
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make
they
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have to
face financial and social problems.
However
, in
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today
's society there are
still
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many
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poor
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people
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who
overcome difficulties and
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become
affluent and even richer than
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many
others. Starbucks boss Howard Schultz,
for instance
, is someone
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who
overcame fate to
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become
the owner of more than 16, 000 Starbucks stores worldwide.

In conclusion
, the more developed society, the larger the gap between the
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poor
and the
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rich
. I
personally
believe that everyone should strive to
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become
better whether
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rich
or
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poor
, and
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people
should close this gap between us
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because
we have the same rights.
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IELTS essay Many people say the gap between rich and poor people is wider, as rich people become richer and poor people grow poorer.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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