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Di me may hoi nhieu qua cham cho tao

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It is widely recognized that shops in city centers are losing out to large shops in suburban areas. This is because the latter have lower rent and pay lower wages for workers due to their location, and so they can offer the same items at lower prices, giving them a definitive competitive edge. As a result, more people are buying cars to benefit from such differences in prices. I strongly believe that this development is a welcome one overall. It is certainly true that the success of large out-of-town shops means small retailers are going out of business, leading their workers to lose their jobs. However, this shift in customers’ buying behavior also creates more jobs for people living near these large stores and higher demand for cars, thus canceling out the problem of job losses in city centers. It is also important to note that customers of shops located in outlying areas can save money since these shops have more competitive prices, as seen above. For example, they can plan ahead what they want to buy and make a weekly trip to suburban shops where they can buy in large quantities at lower prices. Although there are concerns about environmental and traffic problems caused by the increase in the use of cars, I believe that these concerns are misplaced (counter nó). In fact, instead of making regular trips to shops in town centers, people often wait until weekends to buy everything they need for a week in out-of-town shops. This might actually reduce the amount of CO2 released from cars in cities, alleviating the problem of air pollution. Given this change in movement, congestion in cities is also likely to be curbed because fewer and less frequent trips are made for shopping purposes on the city’s roads. In summary, it is my conviction that the shift towards shopping in large out-of-town stores not only helps reduce traffic in cities but also benefits shoppers, and the environment.
It is
widely
recognized that
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shops
in city centers are losing out to
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large
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shops
in suburban areas. This is
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because
the latter have lower rent and pay lower wages for workers due to their location, and
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so
they can offer the same items at lower prices, giving them a definitive competitive edge.
As a result
, more
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people
are buying
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cars
to benefit from such differences in prices. I
strongly
believe that this development is a welcome one
overall
.

It is
certainly
true that the success of
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large
out-of-town
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shops
means
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small
retailers are going out of business, leading their workers to lose their jobs.
However
, this shift in customers’ buying behavior
also
creates more jobs for
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people
living near these
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large
stores and higher demand for
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cars
,
thus
canceling out the problem of job losses in city centers.

It is
also
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important
to note that customers of
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shops
located in outlying areas can save money since these
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shops
have more competitive prices, as
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seen
above.
For example
, they can plan ahead what they want to
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buy
and
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make
a weekly trip to suburban
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shops
where they can
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buy
in
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large
quantities at lower prices.

Although there are concerns about environmental and traffic problems caused by the increase in the
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use
of
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cars
, I believe that these concerns
are misplaced
(counter
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nó
). In fact,
instead
of making regular trips to
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shops
in town centers,
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people
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often
wait until weekends to
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buy
everything they need for a week in out-of-town
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shops
. This might actually
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reduce
the amount of CO2 released from
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cars
in
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cities
, alleviating the problem of air pollution.
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Given
this
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change
in movement, congestion in
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cities
is
also
likely to
be curbed
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because
fewer and less frequent trips
are made
for shopping purposes on the city’s roads.

In summary, it is my conviction that the shift towards shopping in
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large
out-of-town stores not
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only
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helps
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reduce
traffic in
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cities
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but
also
benefits shoppers, and the environment.
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IELTS essay Di me may hoi nhieu qua cham cho tao

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
327 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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