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Many people say the gap between rich and poor people is wider, as rich people become richer and poor people grow poorer. What problems could this situation cause and what measures can be done to address those problems? v.5

Many people say the gap between rich and poor people is wider, as rich people become richer and poor people grow poorer. What problems could this situation cause and what measures can be done to address those problems? v. 5
Its true that gap between rich and poor is increasing day by day. Rich people have lots of money they invest money generated from one business to another. Which ultimately increases their income. Rich people knows very well to utilize and manage their money. Rich people higher peoples to work in organisation, to get more ideas from them. Hired people get well paid. Where as poor people poor people barely manage to earn enough for their daily expences. They don' t have money to work as interpreneur. Bank denies to give loan as they don' t have any mortgage. So they never think to start any buisness. they find job and fail to try for anything new. As poor people keep completing daily needs and fail to save money for future. he spends all salary on needs. This things increases gap between rich and poor people. To overcome this problem our government must come forward to solve this problem. Firstly rich people should pay more taxes than poor people. So that government can use this money for poor people. There are many children and people keeping wish to learn but financial crises avoid them doing it. Children start to work in early age. Job and business oriented education or courses should make free for them. Interest free loan should be provided to group of poor people to start a business. There are many rich people who help poor people by providing scholarship and free education. Ratan Tata, an Indian industrialist worked lot for poor people. His trust gives gives opportunity to all poor people. There are some NGO' s they give free career oriented courses for poor. Many educational institutes in India ask for donation one giving donation gets admission and middle class students having caliber fail to take admission. Government must keep strict eye on them. We have to try from both rich and poor side so together we can have better community to live in otherwise day by day this gap will keep on increasing.
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and
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is increasing day by day.
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Rich
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people
have lots of
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money
they invest
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money
generated from one business to another. Which
ultimately
increases their income.
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Rich
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people
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knows
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very
well to utilize and manage their
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money
.
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Rich
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people
higher
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peoples
to work in
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organisation
, to
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get
more
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ideas
from them. Hired
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people
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get
well paid.

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Where as
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poor
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people
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poor
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people
barely
manage to earn
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enough
for their daily
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expences
. They
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don&
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money
to work as
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interpreneur
. Bank denies to
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give
loan as they
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don&
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they never
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to
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start
any
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buisness
.
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they
find job and fail to try for anything new. As
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poor
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people
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keep
completing daily needs and fail to save
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money
for future.
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he
spends all salary on needs.
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This
things
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increases
gap between
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rich
and
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poor
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people
.

To overcome this problem our
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government
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must
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come
forward to solve this problem.
Firstly
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rich
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people
should pay more taxes than
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poor
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people
.
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that
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can
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use
this
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money
for
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poor
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people
. There are
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many
children and
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people
keeping wish to learn
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but
financial crises avoid them doing it. Children
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start
to work in early age. Job and business oriented education or courses should
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make
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free
for them. Interest
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free
loan should
be provided
to group of
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poor
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people
to
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start
a business.

There are
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many
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rich
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people
who
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help
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poor
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people
by providing scholarship and
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free
education.
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Ratan
Tata, an Indian industrialist worked lot for
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poor
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people
. His trust
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gives
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gives
opportunity to all
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poor
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people
. There are
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some
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NGO&
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give
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free
career oriented courses for
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poor
.
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Many
educational institutes in India
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ask for
donation one giving donation
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gets
admission and middle
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class
students having caliber fail to take admission.
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Government
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must
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keep
strict eye on them.

We
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have to
try from both
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rich
and
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poor
side
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so
together we can have better community to
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live
in
otherwise
day by day this gap will
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keep
on increasing.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
52Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people say the gap between rich and poor people is wider, as rich people become richer and poor people grow poorer. What problems could this situation cause and what measures can be done to address those problems? v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
337 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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