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73)Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

73)Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Nowdays, computers play an important role in our lifes. Most of use are so depended on using computers for our jobs and careers. Some peaple believer that the computers have made life easier. Others disagree. In my view computers has made humans' lifes more convenient for two important reasons. First, without the computers the technology would not be as advanced as it is now. Technology has made humans life easier and safer and they would not be develped if there was no computer. For example, about 4 years age, I studied biomedical engineering. One of the main courses that we had to pass was the basics of computer engineering. In that course, I learned that all the medical equapments that are essential for doctors need powerful computers. Take MRI scanner for example, as you may know, this device scanes pationts body and gives three dimentional view of their inside. This is very helpful in identifing the problems or tumors, which, as you can image, is very important. The importent point is that they depend on a computer to process the signals that they recive from the body of the patient. This clearly illustrates the importance of the computers in the quality of our lifes. Second, computers help us to cuminiucate with each other better and easier. Before the development of computers, it was very hard and costly for humans to cominiucate with far people. But, now, all one needs to do is to connect to Internet and with just one click call anyone he intends to talk to. For example, 7 years ago when I was accepted to study in my favorate university, I had to abandon my familiy and move to another city. But, because of computers, whenever I missed them, I simply used my computer to talk to them, and see their faces which was really helpful to me. Also, last month, I had an interview with a professor in USA. So we used Skype to talk to each other. But back when my father was a student, he told me that when he wanted to apply for studing abroud, he had to write a mail on paper and wait for the reply which usully took atleast two monthes. As you can see, the develpment of computers make us feel closer to each other and also helps us to contact with another ones where easily. In sum, the computers have made life easier. Not only they help humans to have better lifes by developing better equapments, but they also, make us to contact with the ones we love more easily. So, I believe computers should be part of our lifes and we must learn how to use them properly.
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peaple
believer that the computers have made
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easier
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lifes
more convenient for two
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now
. Technology has made
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humans
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life
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easier
and
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safer and
they would not be
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develped
if there was no computer.
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, about 4 years age, I studied biomedical engineering. One of the main courses that we had to pass was the basics of computer engineering. In that course, I learned that all the medical
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equapments
that are essential for doctors need powerful computers. Take MRI scanner
for example
, as you may know, this
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device scanes
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pationts
body and gives three
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dimentional
view of their inside. This is
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helpful in
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identifing
the problems or tumors, which, as you can image, is
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very
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important
. The
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importent
point is that they depend on a computer to process the signals that they
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recive
from the body of the patient. This
clearly
illustrates the importance of the computers in the quality of our
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lifes
.

Second, computers
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help
us to
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cuminiucate
with each
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other
better and
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easier
.
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Before
the development of computers, it was
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very
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hard
and costly for
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humans
to
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cominiucate
with far
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people
.
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,
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now
, all one needs to do is to connect to Internet and with
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just
one click call anyone he intends to talk to.
For example
, 7 years ago when I was
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accepted
to study in my
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favorate
university, I had to abandon my
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familiy
and
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move
to another city.
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But
,
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because
of computers, whenever I missed them, I
simply
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used
my computer to talk to them, and
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see
their faces which was
really
helpful to me.
Also
, last month, I had an interview with a professor
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in USA
.
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So
we
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used
Skype to talk to each
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other
.
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But
back when my father was a student, he
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told
me that when he wanted to apply for
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studing
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abroud
, he had to write a mail on paper and wait for the reply which
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usully
took
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atleast
two
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monthes
. As you can
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see
, the
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develpment
of computers
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make
us feel closer to each
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and
also
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helps
us to contact with another
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ones
where
easily
.

In sum, the computers have made
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life
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easier
. Not
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only
they
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help
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humans
to have better
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lifes
by developing better
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equapments
,
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they
also
,
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make
us to contact with the
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we
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love
more
easily
.
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So
, I believe computers should be part of our
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lifes and
we
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learn how to
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them
properly
.
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
30Mistakes

IELTS essay 73)Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
451 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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