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Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v.3

Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 3
Developments of the countries depend upon some of the fields which include promoting to invest large companies in their countries. This motivates companies to open their branches all over the globe. Everything has its own pros and cons. The advent of this is to get many employment opportunities, but as per my point of view, at a cost of environmental issues. This essay will advocate how multinational companies are causing adverse effects on the environment and give suggestions and examples to support my view. To begin with, modern life requirement leads to discover new products and the brands frequently. Though Science, research and development made it easy, large manpower is required to handle it. To save taxes and other charges, the commercial businesses open their branches in other countries; moreover it helped to achieve the big market all over the world. Thus, for the growth of the company open the market for skilled workers and more employment opportunities not only risen in the scientific fields but also in other fields like commerce, finance. On the flip side, a wide range of production results in producing more garbage and no prominent system is designed to dispose of the waste. For example, product packaging contains plastic material which is relatively low cost, but it cannot be destroyed after the use. Consequently, different kinds of pollution like air, water, noise and light pollution are excessively increased. Nowadays this becomes a global issue and affecting human beings and animals as well. To conclude, though globalisation and a growing number of multinational companies created enormous changes in everyone’s life, they are also responsible for the negative effect on the environment. Environmental protection undoubtedly should become common practices in the countries and they should have strict rules and regulation which needs to be adhered by multinational companies
Developments of the
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countries
depend upon
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some of the
fields which include promoting to invest large
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companies
in their
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countries
. This motivates
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companies
to open their branches all over the globe. Everything has its
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own
pros and cons. The advent of this is to
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get
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many
employment opportunities,
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but
as per my point of view, at a cost of environmental issues. This essay will advocate how multinational
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companies
are causing adverse effects on the environment and give suggestions and examples to support my view.

To
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begin
with, modern life requirement leads to discover new products and the brands
frequently
. Though Science, research and development made it easy, large manpower
is required
to handle it. To save taxes and other charges, the commercial businesses open their branches in other
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countries
;
moreover
it
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helped
to achieve the
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big
market all over the world.
Thus
, for the growth of the
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company
open the market for skilled workers and more employment opportunities not
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only
risen in the scientific fields
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but
also
in other fields like commerce, finance.

On the flip side, a wide range of production results in producing more garbage and no prominent system
is designed
to dispose of the waste.
For example
, product packaging contains plastic material which is
relatively
low cost,
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but
it cannot be
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destroyed
after the
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use
.
Consequently
,
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different
kinds of pollution like air, water, noise and light pollution are
excessively
increased. Nowadays this becomes a global issue and affecting human beings and animals
as well
.

To conclude
, though
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globalisation
and a growing number of multinational
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companies
created enormous
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changes
in everyone’s life, they are
also
responsible for the
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negative
effect on the environment. Environmental protection
undoubtedly
should become common practices in the
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countries and
they should have strict
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rules
and regulation which needs to
be adhered
by multinational
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companies
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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