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Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environmental. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environmental. v. 2
It is considered by many that the increasing number of multinational enterprises and globalisation produce a harmful impact on the society. In my opinion I completely disagree with the statement. In this essay will discuss both sides, first, the agree side is based on the overconsumption concept, following by the worldwide scale which allow loans from the partnership into brands thereby minimising those effects. Globalisation and the industrious number of transnational corporations had opened the door for an uncontrolled overconsumption in goods and services. This means that the main reason come from of Supply Chain where everything which respect of packaging; the waste of clothes, food, plastic and others materials; modern slavery and transportations from a contrary to other ones are involved with it. For example, in the fashion business market, the Supply Chain has been responsible by the consumer behaviour and their unconsciousness about the increase number of exchanges and refunds per brand. In addition to that there are many stimuli in order to incite them to spend money, an illustration of the some commercial centres such as House of Fraser which provide one year to exchange or refund. By contrast, a positive effect of worldwide scale is permitting the financial contribution from business partnership into multinational brands. This means that these institutions provide financial support in order to help companies to become environmental-friendly, therefore, this injection of money will help not only to pay managers, marketing strategies and technical specialists, but also transform the multinational corporate more social and environmental responsibility, looking forwards to recycle, ethical production as well as the promotion of those green practices in the company. For instance, BMW is one of the vehicles’ brands that has been helped by EU partnership in order to transform the car into an electric car models. In conclusion, many opine that the increasing number of multinational organisations leads to a hazardous effect on the environment. I entirely disagree with this statement to virtue by virtue of there are private investors which proceed a control of the best practices inside the organisation in order to protect the environment.
It
is considered
by
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many
that the increasing
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number
of
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multinational
enterprises and
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globalisation
produce a harmful impact on the society. In my opinion I completely disagree with the statement. In this essay will discuss both sides,
first
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
side
is based
on the overconsumption concept, following by the worldwide scale which
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allow
loans from the partnership into
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brands
thereby
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minimising
those effects.

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Globalisation
and the industrious
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number
of transnational corporations had opened the door for an uncontrolled overconsumption in
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goods
and services. This means that the main reason
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come
from of Supply Chain where everything which respect of packaging; the waste of clothes, food, plastic
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and others
materials; modern slavery and transportations from a contrary to other ones
are involved
with it.
For example
, in the fashion business market, the Supply Chain has been responsible by the consumer
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behaviour
and their unconsciousness about the increase
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number
of exchanges and refunds per
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brand
.
In addition
to that there are
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many
stimuli in
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order
to incite them to spend money, an illustration of the
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some
commercial
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centres
such as
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House
of Fraser which provide one year to exchange or refund.

By contrast, a
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positive
effect of worldwide scale is permitting the financial contribution from business partnership into
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multinational
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brands
. This means that these institutions provide financial support in
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order
to
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help
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companies
to become environmental-friendly,
therefore
, this injection of money will
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help
not
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only
to pay managers, marketing strategies and technical specialists,
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but
also
transform the
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multinational
corporate more social and environmental responsibility, looking forwards to recycle, ethical production
as well
as the promotion of those green practices in the
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company
.
For instance
, BMW is one of the vehicles’
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brands
that has been
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helped
by EU partnership in
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order
to transform the car into an electric car models.

In conclusion
,
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many
opine that the increasing
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number
of
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multinational
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organisations
leads to a hazardous effect on the environment. I
entirely
disagree with this statement to virtue by virtue of there are private investors which proceed a control of the best practices inside the
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organisation
in
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order
to protect the environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environmental. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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