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Many people say that companies should give importance to their employees whereas others say that they should give importance to customer.

Many people say that companies should give importance to their employees whereas others say that they should give importance to customer. E967M
In the present era, where a plethora of industries develops. Some people assert that companies should give importance to their employees, whereas many others argue that, they should provide facilities for customers. Convincing arguments can be made that happy employees can lead to happy client's. To start with, nowadays often factory is growing due to employee's hard work. In another word, employees make the developer industry. If employed does not work in companies, the factory can not produce more product and as a result, it will gradually down. Moreover, a numerous manufactory who provide all necessary facilities for employees. For example; reliance companies supply many conveniences of employees such as a house, electricity, security, garden, and so on. On the other hand, the main reason that to give the favour of the customer. First of all, the relationship between organisation and customer is an important one. Sometimes manufacturing gives a good offer to customers for attracting them. For example; often industry provides great service for impressing their clients. In my perspective that, both are important and give some respect to them. Because of customer and employees are balancing of company. That's a response, factories grow day by day. I would concede that yard should lend good convenience of hire and petro. In summary, I would like to mention that although the customer has always been the king in a company, but in today's competitive market the organisation have to look intro employees happiness simultaneously
In the present era, where a plethora of industries develops.
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give
importance to their
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employees
, whereas
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others argue that, they should provide facilities for customers.

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be made
that happy
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employees
can lead to happy client's. To
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start
with, nowadays
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often
factory is growing due to employee's
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hard
work. In another word,
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employees
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make
the developer industry. If employed does not work in
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companies
, the factory can not produce more product and
as a result
, it will
gradually
down.
Moreover
, a numerous
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manufactory
who provide all necessary facilities for
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employees
.
For example
; reliance
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companies
supply
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many
conveniences of
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employees
such as a
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house
, electricity, security, garden, and
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on.

On the other hand
, the main reason that to
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give
the
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favour
of the
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customer
.
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First of all
, the relationship between
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organisation
and
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customer
is an
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important
one.
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manufacturing
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gives
a
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good
offer to
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customers
for attracting them.
For example
;
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often
industry provides great service for impressing their clients.

In my perspective that, both are
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important
and
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respect to them.
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of
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customer
and
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employees
are balancing of
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company
. That's a response, factories grow day by day. I would concede that yard should lend
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good
convenience of hire and
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petro
.

In summary, I would like to mention that although the
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customer
has always been the king in a
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company
,
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but
in
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today
's competitive market the
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organisation
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have to
look intro
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employees
happiness
simultaneously
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IELTS essay Many people say that companies should give importance to their employees whereas others say that they should give importance to customer.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
243 words
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