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Many people say that companies, factory owners and privates tour operates should pay the bills for cleaning up pollution, instead of government. To what extend do you agree or disagree. v.1

Many people say that companies, factory owners and privates tour operates should pay the bills for cleaning up pollution, instead of government. v. 1
It is undoubted that the accelerating rate of contamination has ushered in some pressing concerns for society as a whole. While I agree that organizations should be responsible for the fee that spending to protect environment, while I would argue that government should pay for environmental protection. On the one hand, Institutions need to pay the bills to slash contaminant incidence because the industry development has a severe influence on the environment. As illustration, firms and tourism industry discharged pollutants into the atmosphere during their production processes, causing greenhouse effect and global warming. For example, companies produce a million products such as car, train or aeroplane which run on fossil fuel and release many carbonic to the atmosphere. If they do not make an effort to invest in developing fuel-efficient vehicles or eco-friendly alternatives, the ecosystem will face the risk of serious deterioration. On the other hand, as it may seem, prolonged companies solely cannot effectively curb the alarming pollution rate. Consequently, the government also should spend money to solve environmental contamination. It means that, residents as well as firms pay taxes for the government to contribute to boost economic development, thereby government need to bring a friendly environment for the society. For instance, local authorities should give top priority to spend money on creating renewable energies like wind, hydro, solar power and developing infrastructure public to facilitate favourable to people have an environment-friendly life. In conclusion, although I concur with the responsibility of organizations for fee of protecting environment, I would believe that the government should pay to clean up the pollution.
It
is undoubted
that the accelerating rate of contamination has ushered in
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some
pressing concerns for society as a whole. While I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that organizations should be responsible for the fee that spending to protect
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
, while I would argue that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
for environmental protection.

On the one hand, Institutions need to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
the bills to slash contaminant incidence
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the industry development has a severe influence on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
. As illustration, firms and tourism industry discharged pollutants into the atmosphere during their production processes, causing greenhouse effect and global warming.
For example
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
produce a million products such as car, train or
Possible spelling mistake. 'aeroplane' is British English.
aeroplane
which run on fossil fuel and release
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many
carbonic to the atmosphere. If they do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an effort to invest in developing fuel-efficient vehicles or eco-friendly alternatives, the ecosystem will face the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of serious deterioration.

On the other hand
, as it may seem, prolonged
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
solely
cannot
effectively
curb the alarming pollution rate.
Consequently
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
also
should spend money to solve environmental contamination. It means that, residents
as well
as firms
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
taxes for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
to contribute to boost economic development, thereby
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
need to bring a friendly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
for the society.
For instance
, local authorities should give top priority to spend money on creating renewable energies like wind, hydro, solar power and developing infrastructure public to facilitate
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourable' is British English.
favourable
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have an environment-friendly life.

In conclusion
, although I concur with the responsibility of organizations for fee of protecting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
, I would believe that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
to clean up the pollution.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people say that companies, factory owners and privates tour operates should pay the bills for cleaning up pollution, instead of government. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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