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What is your opinion, Should a factory be built in your community? Personally, i think that building a factory in my community is not a good idea. First, although it will bring more jobs for people who live in the community, a factory might still affect pe v.1

What is your opinion, Should a factory be built in your community? Personally, i think that building a factory in my community is not a good idea. First, although it will bring more jobs for people who live in the community, a factory might still affect pe v. 1
Computers are becoming increasingly used in schools. While some people believe that using computers is good for students to make their study better, others disagree and reckon it will lead to adverse development. This essay will discuss why using computers is excellent in the study and also explain some benefits to not being used computers in the study. There are many individuals who suggest that using computers in education has many benefits. With the help of computers, learners understand things in a better way on the Internet, because of everything on the Internet update day by day. For example, most of the students study science and they get the good stuff from the Internet. In addition, students also learn the basics of computers. These reasons reveal why computers have good effects on students. In contrast, other people think using more computers in education tend to negative result. Computers make every student lazy and also affect their health. It will make them weaker, which is not good for their education. For instance, computers hide the real ability of students in education and it will lead to the negative development of students. Although these parents are somewhere true, without the computers there is no future in education. In conclusion, technology makes education better and easier. This essay discussed why computers play an important role in education, whereas it has some negative results. In my opinion, Using more and more computers in education will help students for their better future.
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used
in schools. While
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some
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people
believe that using computers is
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good
for
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students
to
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make
their study
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better
, others disagree and reckon it will lead to adverse development. This essay will discuss why using computers is excellent in the study and
also
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explain
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some
benefits to not being
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used
computers in the study.

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many
individuals who suggest that using computers in
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education
has
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many
benefits. With the
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help
of computers, learners understand things in a
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better
way on the Internet,
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because
of everything on the Internet update day by day.
For example
, most of the
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students
study
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science and
they
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get
the
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good
stuff from the Internet.
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,
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students
also
learn the basics of computers. These reasons reveal why computers have
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good
effects on students.

In contrast
, other
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people
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think
using more computers in
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education
tend to
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negative
result. Computers
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make
every
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student
lazy and
also
affect their health. It will
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make
them weaker, which is not
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good
for their
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education
.
For instance
, computers
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hide
the real ability of
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students
in
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education
and it will lead to the
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negative
development of
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students
. Although these parents are somewhere true, without the computers there is no future in education.

In conclusion
, technology
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makes
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education
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better
and easier. This essay discussed why computers play an
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important
role in
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education
, whereas it has
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some
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negative
results. In my opinion, Using more and more computers in
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education
will
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help
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students
for their
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better
future.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay What is your opinion, Should a factory be built in your community? Personally, i think that building a factory in my community is not a good idea. First, although it will bring more jobs for people who live in the community, a factory might still affect pe v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
247 words
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7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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