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Many people prefer to stay in the same type of work all their life, whereas others prefer to change the type of work. Discuss both sides and state your own opinion.

It is undeniable that everyone dreams to have both - a prosperous career and a contented family. However, there seem to be a lot of problems preventing people from achieving that goal. This essay shall discuss these problems and suggest some solutions. The first problem is that today’s world is ruled by money and so people devote a lot of time to their work or business. They have become workaholics. As a result, they fail to draw a line between work and family. Second reason is the cut-throat competition of today. Young people, new to their job have to put in their time and effort to meet the expectations of their employers. Similarly, those who run their own businesses have to drive their business otherwise their business can drive them out. Another problem is that the family expectations are soaring higher and higher day by day. The earning hand is expected to fulfil all those expectations as well as give time to his family. Sometimes, it becomes difficult to live up to those expectations and this leads to stress. The solutions are not simple. People have to learn to set their priorities. Some things have to be sacrificed for the sake of others. Effective time management is very important. The most severe problem existing among most people tends to be their unsuccessful time management. Then, people should learn to switch the office button off, once they come home. Practicing some exercise regime for a few minutes every day can keep a person physically fit enough to have a successful work-life balance. The non-working members of the families too can help in this respect. They should try to support, to care and to understand the efforts that others are making. One meal of the day should be fixed which all members have to have together. A more practical way to be considered might be setting up family plans, for example, a monthly family trip or weekly picnic, to share some happy time and memories together. Summing up, I believe that with a mutual understanding of each other and continuous efforts, people will eventually find the balance point of their life and work.
It is undeniable that everyone dreams to have both
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a prosperous career and a contented
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family
.
However
, there seem to be
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a lot of
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problems
preventing
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people
from achieving that goal. This essay shall discuss these
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problems
and suggest
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some
solutions.

The
first
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problem
is that
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today
’s world
is ruled
by money and
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so
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people
devote
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a lot of
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time
to their work or
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business
. They have become workaholics.
As a result
, they fail to draw a line between work and
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family
. Second reason is the
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cut
-throat competition of
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today
. Young
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people
, new to their job
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have to
put in their
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time
and effort to
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meet
the
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expectations
of their employers.
Similarly
, those who run their
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own
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businesses
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have to
drive their
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business
otherwise
their
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business
can drive them out. Another
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problem
is that the
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family
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expectations
are soaring
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higher


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and
higher day by day. The earning hand is
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expected
to fulfil all those
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expectations
as well
as give
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time
to his
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family
.
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Sometimes
, it becomes difficult to
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live
up to those
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expectations
and this leads to
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stress
. The solutions are not simple.
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People
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have to
learn to set their priorities.
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Some
things
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have to
be sacrificed
for the sake of others. Effective
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time
management is
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very
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important
. The most severe
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problem
existing among most
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people
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tends
to be their unsuccessful
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time
management. Then,
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people
should learn to switch the office button off, once they
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come
home. Practicing
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some
exercise regime for a few minutes every day can
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keep
a person
physically
fit
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enough
to have a successful work-life balance.

The non-working members of the
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families
too can
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help
in this respect. They should try to support, to care and to understand the efforts that others are making. One meal of the day should be
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fixed
which all members
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have to
have together. A more practical way to
be considered
might be setting up
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family
plans,
for example
, a monthly
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family
trip or weekly picnic, to share
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some
happy
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time
and memories together. Summing up, I believe that with a mutual understanding of each other and continuous efforts,
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people
will
eventually
find the balance point of their life and work.
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IELTS essay Many people prefer to stay in the same type of work all their life, whereas others prefer to change the type of work.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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