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Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development? v.5

Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development? v. 5
A considerable quantity of individuals have an inclination to save their income rather than spending it. I really believe that this conditionally depends on the fiscal status of the country. Difficult, though, it might seem to be, some people just attempt to cut the corners and keep the money they earn for a diversity of reasons. With the advancement of technology, folks are more likely to visit different countries and be introduced to the novel cultures instead of the domestic journeys. According to MNY(National University of Malaysia), in the vicinity of 80 percent of youths in newly developed countries fully expressed that traveling abroad is what they have chosen to do in their free time. Being financially prepared in cases of emergencies and fully supported regarding capital resources is also has to be shed light on. To clarify, a sudden disease requisite a considerable amount of money regardless of the other dimensions it might have. In this case what people, usually, if not always, do is to put some money aside for critical crisis so that they can tackle the issue, Moreover, this is mostly about fathers who feel like they are responsible for the future of tall family members and sense of moral obligation and love they have toward the others. In general, saving adequate fiscal resources, while seriously common, is a disputable topic that has drawn pundits' attention. Saving money is a prosperous strategy to be well prepared for a brighter future, but in some circumstances, it would be such a colossal waste of cash as these countries, for instance, Iran are suffering from high inflation and the other economical obstacles such embezzlement. This means that under no circumstances should they save a significant amount of money as the currency may lose its power steadily. As a way of conclusion, there are various attitudes toward whether it is an appropriate strategy to save budget or not and there are, of course, some factors as well, And the point that saving is not always the best choice to make should not be abandoned.
A considerable quantity of individuals have an inclination to save their income
rather
than spending it. I
really
believe that this
conditionally
depends on the fiscal status of the country.

Difficult, though, it might seem to be,
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some
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people
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just
attempt to
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cut
the corners and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the
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money
they earn for a diversity of reasons. With the advancement of technology, folks are more likely to visit
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different
countries and
be introduced
to the novel cultures
instead
of the domestic journeys. According to
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MNY
(National University of Malaysia), in the vicinity of 80 percent of youths in
newly
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developed countries
fully
expressed that traveling abroad is what they have chosen to do in their free time.

Being
financially
prepared in cases of emergencies and
fully
supported regarding capital resources is
also
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has to
be shed
light on. To clarify, a sudden disease requisite a considerable amount of
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money
regardless of the other dimensions it might have.
In this case
what
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
,
usually
, if not always, do is to put
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some
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money
aside for critical crisis
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so
that they can tackle the issue,
Moreover
, this is
mostly
about fathers who feel like they are responsible for the future of tall family members and sense of moral obligation and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
they have toward the others.

In general
, saving adequate fiscal resources, while
seriously
common, is a disputable topic that has drawn
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pundits&
#039; attention. Saving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
is a prosperous strategy to be
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well prepared
for a brighter future,
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but
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
circumstances, it would be such a colossal waste of cash as these countries,
for instance
, Iran are suffering from high inflation and the other economical obstacles such embezzlement. This means that under no circumstances should they save a significant amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
as the currency may lose its power
steadily
.

As a way of conclusion, there are various attitudes toward whether it is an appropriate strategy to save budget or not and there are,
of course
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
factors
as well
, And the point that saving is not always the best choice to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
should not
be abandoned
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development? v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
344 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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